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Tomorrow Never Comes
Thoughts buried in the furnace, as my notebook turns to ashes
Plots stirring me wordless....... strongly grasping the matches
i've burned what was left of me & sadly... its overwhelming
falling in love w/ non existance.. my mind slips into sober dwellings
my disturbing thoughts nurse my wicked desires to not exist
burning thoughts curse when my knife gets cozy with my wrist
i'd reach my soul to the skies above.. mind shifted through stars
so i left my pondering thoughts to float... but they drifted too far
here in the dark, it's aweful lonely.... pills wearing thin
but the best thing about nobody caring is me not having to care for them
shadows in the ruins of the candle lit room in which i'm laying
i'll scream for the light to darken until the candles begin obeying
DO YOU HEAR WHAT IM SAYING! I don't want to live, leave me be
you see, this is me... & don't think its a depression streak in me
this is me, no scientific reason why i'm the way I am
to truly survive in life, you have to literally pay by hand
gotta give an arm and a leg, eyes blood shot yet the shadows stay in sight
must write a letter... for I will decide my fate this night
i reach for the quill, ink spills through the cracks of the floor
with a shaky hand i'm steadily writing my goodbye.. closing the door
to my wife, children, and family... now my sorrow forever nums
my pain has taken a stand.. for now...... tomorrow never comes
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Standard made a OM with this exact title...
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my disturbing thoughts nurse my wicked desires to not exist
burning thoughts curse when my knife gets cozy with my wrist
^^dope bar here man... nice
some thought provoking stuff here man.... quite deep in certain aspects.... props for htat, its not a new concept, but well executed.... teachnically it was sound too, not overly complex, but decent.... good job bro
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I liked it Toke. I felt almost every word, I am actually, at the moment, speechless because I didn't even know you did topicals. If you wrote this, all of it, you have some real talent my man.
pz
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this was dope toke, feeling most of it except some of the stuff after the middle.. lots of emotion put in this i see.. i liked how it started out too.. like the first 10 bars were really dope man.. good read .. props.. peep mine when you see it.. thanks
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"here in the dark, it's aweful lonely.... pills wearing thin
but the best thing about nobody caring is me not having to care for them"
^So ill and tru.
The first half was really dope. Your wording was very nice. Flow and everything was on. I really enjoyed this piece. The only downside it the last quarter of it, and the whole suicide concept. Seems like almost every other OM has something to do with suicide. It was still a good read. Nice job.
-W1
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thanks guys, preciate it
& to Spit.. lol yes I wrote all of that.. thanks for the props
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yesterday
i like the "knife got cosy with wrist part" kinda sick dude , it reminded me the pain u intend.
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thanks, appreciate it..
more feedback please??
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Very Provoking To The Mind I Think U Captured The Emmotion Therough Most Peoples Mind When They Peak To The Highestr Degree Of Derpression I Loved It