Bush 2004

Why everyone hatin on bush// shut the fuck up b4 i stick my timb in your tush// oh shit look, i'm bout to start an uproar// i went to iraq and scream "saddam stick it up yours" // what yall know bout communisim and poverty// all u anti- war fags are an american mockery// obviously, u dont know what u actually sayin// i guess we should take the attack on pearl harbor as "the japs were just playin"// we lost more people in the W.T.C.// cant u see, terorrism is real to u and me// i got a 3 year old son and i dont want him to die// these terrorists r still trying, even after the planes in the sky// so realize and let it penetrate in your head// if we dont fight this war, we better off dead.

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

Well, well, preach on, preach on....I like this piece cuz you tellin the TRUTH, ya flow a litte choppy but I caught it(try workin on that a little bit) not too bad...
Best line to me....
"obviously, u dont know what u actually sayin//
i guess we should take the attack on pearl harbor as "the japs were just playin"//"...
that was a mind opener.....

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Originally Posted by bLaZin_InfeRnoL

Well, well, preach on, preach on....I like this piece cuz you tellin the TRUTH, ya flow a litte choppy but I caught it(try workin on that a little bit) not too bad...
Best line to me....
"obviously, u dont know what u actually sayin//
i guess we should take the attack on pearl harbor as "the japs were just playin"//"...
that was a mind opener.....

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thanks, all opinions and advice r welcomed

Well, I will be honest as always, this was technically shakey, a bit rushed in many areas, and all together not as impacting as such a peice could have been. I feel your message, as I share your views big time, but I can't critique your views here, just the package you pressented them in. I would put much more time and efort into such a drop, more so if you trying to reach someone withit, or standing your ground. I respectt he message much, and I too write on such truths. I just think this could have been structually, technicaly and emotonally better.
-B

well the title put me off before i started....

this sorta thing aint really interesting to me... sick of seeing this sorta thing on TV

also the layout sucks

basically this wasnt good.... work on it man... be creative

The structure in this wasnt to good and I agree with most of the comments above..

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Originally Posted by SchmoK-Brayk

Well, I will be honest as always, this was technically shakey, a bit rushed in many areas, and all together not as impacting as such a peice could have been. I feel your message, as I share your views big time, but I can't critique your views here, just the package you pressented them in. I would put much more time and efort into such a drop, more so if you trying to reach someone withit, or standing your ground. I respectt he message much, and I too write on such truths. I just think this could have been structually, technicaly and emotonally better.
-B

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i appreciate the good advice...

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