"Portrait Of Mind.." - [Euthanasia]

Portrait Of Mind

People display their emotions in their own personal ways
Some bottle it up, others amaze you with angry displays
When the stakes get raised everyday is filled with grief
Friends see whats on the surface, but what's underneath?
Beneath the suface is a soul and a new person inside
And it's like that guys pride wont let the two ever collide
So the real him gets pushed aside til he writes his rhymes
Then it comes out, he paints a written portrait of his mind
Just read between the lines to see his true personality
And you'll realise that what you thought is not the reality
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Thoughts paint pictures in minds..
Elegant photos that tell a story..
A tale of past poetry and rhymes..

Colors mix and blend in this picture of mine..
Images fix and extend this beautiful portrait..
To distort this, provoking painting of time..

Essenceful senses explain pain..
To tame this insane game of life..
Will I make it through this pain and strife?..

Blunt knifes slash ideas with ease..
Barriers tease brains who cannot think..
Of topics, so these cells decease..

The questions increase, will answers come?..
Or is this chapter of life done?..
Will the darkness brighten for a new day to come?..

Will all of these thoughts and memories stay?..
Or will a God get upset and say..
That all of these portraits of my mind will be washed away?..
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"From Black...to red...to yellow...to blue...
to skies...to grass...to me...to you...
My portrait of mind...never has a conclusion...
The brush...in no rush never stops movin'...
a frozen time glass...bullet stuck in the gun...
Athletes at starting lines...ready, but never run...
but suddenly...the sand falls n' right after, rises...
Strangely enuff...leaves no suprises
A portrait of mind...a collection of pages...
Everything in my thoughts...constantly changes..."
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Intellectual philosophers paint portraits through the sands of time
With a planned design to surpass the intelligence of the human mind
Life long memories create a cinema of reflection such as mine
There is no barrier within my brain for impulsive thoughts to hide behind
Passion lures me into a portrait of a mind as I were deaf learning the language of sign
So many thing are said with utter silence but within a rhyme lies a view
Self expression of the mind but how do you feel when that portrait is you


Verse One: LM
Verse Two: Bloomquist
Verse Three: Twest
Verse Four: ..Newz..

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LM:
Cool verse. The flow was nice.
"Beneath the suface is a soul and a new person inside"
- Nice.
"So the real him gets pushed aside til he writes his rhymes"
-Truth to a degree in my life. Nice shit.


Bloomquist:
Nice flow. Scheme fot weaker as it went but it was still good. I like that three line stanza style that you went with. Nice shit.

"Colors mix and blend in this picture of mine..
Images fix and extend this beautiful portrait..
To distort this, provoking painting of time.."
-Illness

T-West:
I'm just going to quote your ill lines...

"From Black...to red...to yellow...to blue...
to skies...to grass...to me...to you...
My portrait of mind...never has a conclusion...
The brush...in no rush never stops movin'...
a frozen time glass...bullet stuck in the gun...
Athletes at starting lines...ready, but never run...
but suddenly...the sand falls n' right after, rises...
Strangely enuff...leaves no suprises
A portrait of mind...a collection of pages...
Everything in my thoughts...constantly changes...""
-Lmao. This whole verse was just about perfection. You keep getting iller. I feel like your sprinting and I'm jogging in place. Lol. Nice, homie.

Fore:
Cool verse. Flow was a little off because of long lines but still a decent verse.

"Intellectual philosophers paint portraits through the sands of time
With a planned design to surpass the intelligence of the human mind"
-Nice, but would have been really ill if the last rhyme was multi sylible like "sands of time/ planned design"

"So many thing are said with utter silence"
-Word.

Overall, good shit, fella. I enjoyed the read. Keep up the good work.

-W1

i agree with the shit that wicked siad but i think you all had strong points to the callab each one brought something to it feeling the line on point great structure by all of you glad to see this type of ill shit in the crew keep up the good work all of you dope quotables too but wicked already mentiond most of them

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LM - i think i liked your verse the best..i dunno, it was short and sweet, as were the others, but i got more from it, good use of vocab and emotive language.

Bloom - nice wordplay and emotion..it transitioned really easily from LM's previous verse. One hell of a good read. (Love you :love:)

Twest - one again, nice verse, transitioned well from Bloom's, leaving little error in flow, though the structure was totally different..it gelled.

Newz - nice verse, nice concepts but i felt that it didn't transition too well, and made a sort of break point from the other three verses. Good non the less.


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