So Far Away

Look, this one girl is special, she gives me a feeling inside
I can't simply describe with words, and I'm serious guys.
Its a mysterious vibe I get when ever she appears in my sight.
The feelings tremendous and the only thing that keeps me alive.
I continue to strive to impress the girl I wish was my bride
And I only hope that she notice me when I peer through her eyes
Protruded by lies I stand alone in this game
Who is to blame for my blinding acts I remain
Without the girl that I love so my feelings continue to strain
Cuz that special someone is so close but feels so far away

I went for quality not quantity on this one. Its pretty crappy right now, I'm still a little rusty.
Feedback people?

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pretty good bro....you let out your emotions hahah......you had a flow goin the throughout the thing which was good. i liked the rhymes...they were fluent which is def. a plus....keep it up....im out...

you need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

Wheres the love people...???

it was pretty decent...it sounded like a true story cuz i cud tell wen some1 sounz alil sprung...but the verse was pretty good...u need some more meta4s tho...cuz its pretty simple...u gotta spit shyt that will make ppl think...das wen a verse is ILL...wen u remember shyt for a while !...all n all...pretty good...work on ur game fam...1