My Life....Feedback Plz....

my hood is filled with excessive violence
hookers lookin for their clients
a land surrounded by gangsta pirates
people knowin killers but they stayin quiet
people think they know me but have no clue
i'll start more desert storms then d.j clue
im not a gangsta so how much times do i got reiterate it
u fuckin pussies dont know good music or how to appreicate it
watch me dominate like the cardinals do the M.L.B
y'all dont believe in commerical but im ready to see all of L.A from my balcony
"imma big dogg u a lil bow wow, so y u dont u bow to me
u think u tough but in real life u gettin beat down is wat u bound to see"
i've seen killers do killin, rapers rape the unwillin
so dont say i havent seen bad, u dont know u havent seen mad
i've seen struggle, seen trouble, seen muthafuckas get hustled
u aint seen me get them gurls sprung like ol' otis
u wouldnt notice but i get more high than the doggfather calvin brodus
i got more "X" than magic mountain,more "speed" than an atlanta falcon
now u when think of me dont think imma follower imma boss
im jus a lyrical talker whose tryin to get his point across



" is talkin about RB's own Suspect"

ol otis is a character that was played by Martin Lawerence in his hit t.v series "Martin"



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=141300
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=140571

this was an aight piece had a nice flow to it nice read the whole way nice conent and hshit this piece had me thinking alot at the end keep doing the thing homie

BE KIND PEEP MINE

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=141873

yo nice drop Money..........flow was on point looked real good!!!!!!! Do the damn thang pz!!!!!!

thanks for the feedback fam...

^^^Uppin^^^

iight man .. u showed a bit a lyrical skill in this drop ..

nice flow aswell

pz

Thanks For The Feedback Lets Keep It Comin

not bad man, had some pretty good flow, and some decent vocab and metaphors...started out strongly then seemed to level off a bit...still a good drop
check mine out..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...80#post1630680
thanks

To gangsterish, topic is way to played. Good emotion which made it diferent. Ide rather not read peices about the hood tho

^^^ Hater haha look every topic anyone comes up with is play'd everything has been done..........tell me all the shit thats out right now is original......no.......everything has been recycled so i don't think you can really knock anyone for that!!!!!!!! Thats just my oppinion on that whole play'd thing!!!!!!!what do you want us to rap about drugs, sex, pimps,^^^life, hoes, the rocks on my chain c,mon gimme a topic no one has used??? This is the only thing about this site i don't like you guys are way to junior college for me.......tell me that if you battle someone on the street wich i doubt 3/4 of this site has.......that after there verse your like awww ur vocbulary was off i wasn't feeling topic its been play'd haha you get your ass kicked by a real emcee that flows off the dome!!!! I think we're just to street for you!!!!!