Feelin You: Techniques feat. {SociaL* ServeR}

TECH verse:

girl talk about love at first sight.
didnt know wha 2 do but think bout chu all night.
thinkin bout life,and how it wouldnt be without you&me
2-getha,4-eva, i wish dreams would come realities
tag-team make L O V E worth living for
seein~~~bein~~with la'donna make life even more
baby....they say live life to da fullest,,,,boo
is it true(dunno) but i know i couldnt live wit out you
got it bad 4 ya cuz i still trip off ya look
u da numba one reason why i even thought up dis hook


chorus:
when i look into the stars all i see is your eyes
when i look into the sky all i see is the stars
so you know what im thinkin bout......
24/7 u b on my mind
without u~~love is hard to find
so you know what im thinkin bout......
ima take it to the heart wit all my soul.
got 1 thing i want you to know that...I Love You......



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DoublE S girl ^

DoublE S verse:

dis was a different thing for me
usually i neva let a girl know me so easy
sometimes i instantly clasify girls as
trouble and sleasy
but somehow u broke da forcefealed
dat exceed me
it might be yo shape, or yo eyes at
a glance
or it might be yo face or the size of
yo pants
could it be a mistake, by lettin u in?
but all i can remember is all da lovin u send
if u look at us u can see dat us a couple we blend
cuz i look back and we more in love den we ever have been
so i let my guard down and let da thug image die
no girl could break us i would neva let da luv in is die
u live right across da street and dats gotta be fate
cuz if we eva wanna meet, we don't even gotta wait

jus tell one thing i neva told a girl b4 me
i luv u girl even if u was ugly....

FEEDBACK NIGGAS !!!!!

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.lol stop it nigga naw that was aight a little soft but aight.lol.yo check the kok avatar out on my link.

ok umm this was very simple... and when i say simple a mean your ryhmes were very predictable... how much time did you take on this? not hating ... i could spit a freestyle off the top a my head better than this man. you need to throw more multis in it man and maybe think of a original rhyme scheme..... get rid of your end line rhyme style...

but apart from that this was nice man.... keep droping

oh yeah nice gurl ....looks my age ..she 17- 18...... you seem in love

not let her fool u man........dollers over hoes.......remember that

^its bros before Hoes

any way u need to leave two links of Feed u left other ppl or this will be closed....

any way this wasnt bad ur rhyme scheme was a bit simple...the topic aint bad im i felt the Deepness to it...u both didnt have bad verses but i would say SS had the betta verse between both of you....flow was nice but need a lil work TEK had betta flow...i like the pic very hott but needs multis....

pZ

Nah, this was wack..

Maybe I could say it was on point a few times, but everything else needs work.. Multies, structure, flow, rhyme sceme, length, chorus, everything.. Honestly, I did not like reading the piece.. Nice try though..

2/10

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.