Blinded By Battle

Blinded By Battle
Written By Timeless

Into the night their weapons fired; and the
Night grew into day
The soldiers marched into the battle
Heads held high,
Elite, were they

Countries challenged other countries
Oceans crossed, the lands destroyed
United, soldiers marched in battle
Naval ships and jets employed
Tens of thousands would be heroes
Raged against their fellow man
Young or old, it made no difference
Over countless hills they ran
Fearless in their quest for victory
They stood tall and took their aim
Hit and felled intended targets
Ever strong the soldiers came

Blinded in the rage of battle
Loosing not, to claim defeat
Into war, they carried onward
Nameless faces on the street
Donned with guns and bullets many
Officers to guide their way
Never fearing, they moved onward
Lighting darkest night to day
Years of careful preparation and
The best of weaponry
Half the world enjoined together
Engaged in battle to be free

Only one can be the victor
Now the final hour’s here
Each man stands against the other
Each refuses to show fear
Yielding never, they continue
Endless gunshots fill the air
Dying soldiers fall beside them
Masks of death, their comrades wear
Every man no longer thinking
Numb and blind beyond compare
“All or nothing!” scream their leaders
Resounding shouts, “the victory’s near!”
Early morning light arises
Killed and wounded lie in wait
In the final stage of battle
No one recognized their fate
Guns once roaring, now are silent
~and with the rising of the sun
Screams of pain have all grown quiet
~a war was fought, but no one won

In The Country Of The Blind Only The One Eyed Men Are Kings

replied to http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=140444

This was real good you know. I like how you did the sentence on the side of it and it turned out real good. You had nice imagery and your details were great nice work.

thanks..............i'll reply to yours soon..............uppin

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i cant belive this is getting slept on after all the poem's i've replied to :(

Nice concept....I have seen some of these but this one definetly stood out from the ranks of the rest. I mean the vocab, structure, flow, everything seemed to fall in place.

I mean the message and story you got across was good to read plus it didn't get boring when you read it. Nice drop man.......

"Only one can be the victor
Now the final hour’s here
Each man stands against the other
Each refuses to show fear
Yielding never, they continue
Endless gunshots fill the air
Dying soldiers fall beside them
Masks of death, their comrades wear"

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Good part! :thumbup:


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=140645

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this is very good, i enjoyed it much, simple flow, but it wa sa near flawless simple flow and structure...this is up to your usual standards, and i liek the acronym effect..even though it's nto an acromyn, i forgot what those poems are called where u have the lettes at the beginning of each lien say something..i knwo what it's called, but i can't remember, adn i dont feel like trying to think of it...anyway..very good, simple

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