depression

I Cut Myself, To Feel The Pain
The Pain In Which, Keeps Me Sane
I Know You Hate It, As Do I
It's My Way Of Getting Thru It, Times I Want 2 Die
I Want 2 Stop, I've Really Tried
But When I See The Blood, I Feel Sooo Alive
And I Know U Say, If I Want 2 Cut And Bleed
To Come 2 You, For The Shoulder I Need
But It's So Hard 4 Me, To Let My Feelings Out
I Wont Be Able To Do It,
Although My Heart Screams And Shoutz
You Dont Understand It, And I Dont Expect U To
But Sometimes I Just Fuckin Cant Take This Shit,
So I Do What I Got To Do
I Hate To See You Hurt, Same With U And I
But Our Hurtz Are So Different, The Question Is Why

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And for the sake of all of us, will you please cut deeper? Y'know what your problem is? You don't have a job. Get a fucking job.

Face this was pretty emotional but you lacked alot of description and imagery. I think that would have made this piece alot stronger but it was decent none the less.

lichwise......i do have a job....i do drywall and i work 14hours a day you idiot... Damn shut up before you are made to look stupid

uppin for some more feedback

keep in mind that this is not a true poem it is just a poem about my friend that used to cut.....

Nothing very great. Cutting, depression, sadness. No real twist to it. Same as all the other "im sad im giving up on life" pieces. IF you want to write something readers will love, you have to put a twist and imagination in it. This is just like all the other Depression poems, not really any different.

this wasnt the bes of all poems that ive seen from you, but its good to me...the reason being, i can completely relate to this...im just about every way.

keep droppin
return tha favor

....bless

Keep in mind people except me are too nice to say you suck.

Well...what this lacked in words it made up for in emotional content...was kinda simple in the scheme...but...myself speaking...when you're that low thats about as deep as you really want...so...i hope all is well with friend and I'll be looking for more from ya...short and sweet...this was a decent read...pz

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LichWise... If i suck why dont you just look at my others at the top of the page... A Thousand Wishes and Finality

then tell me i suck you fucking bitch