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This kid’s tagline says “hi there… I’m new” … and he’s about to get wrecked by a kid name Stu…this ain’t the playground kid what’s the matta for you…like the chick from exorcist I was born to spew
Don't mean to make you mad, by Charlie Brown's a fag
Let me put your votes in a bag, paper or plastic?
I got cash for life and I feel FANTASTIC
This kids the latest victum…getting his d/r votes right up the rectum
getting it doggy style from snoopy, who's the real bitch....hollywoodnt
you're punches are incoherent like the teacher on your show...
no-one gets what you're saying, you're the only one that knows...
Aiyo, winnin is easy cause you spit half assed
Lookin like joe camel done ripped in half..
Ill de-feet you, remove the horseshoes from this lucky butt-plug
You gettin drained of stylish flows like bubbles in a model's bathtub.
Layed out like a persian rug, you gettin stomped on
Kid is fake, like Sean John long john
Im grillin this punk...he's gonna come out charred,
DNV of all your friends...like barbequeing with retards.
You cant see lyrically, im strapped wit nines and ill blow a hole in ya ass in unda a minute
Got this bitch wondering..."whats so bad about putting some caulk in it?"
DNV
This kid’s tagline says “hi there… I’m new” … and he’s about to get wrecked by a kid name Stu…this ain’t the playground kid what’s the matta for you…like the chick from exorcist I was born to spew
I hope your name is Stu bcause if it ain't then that about wraps up this battle
Don't mean to make you mad, by Charlie Brown's a fag
Let me put your votes in a bag, paper or plastic?
I got cash for life and I feel FANTASTIC
wack
This kids the latest victum…getting his d/r votes right up the rectum
getting it doggy style from snoopy, who's the real bitch....hollywoodnt
umm vitcim and rectum don't rhyme
You're punches are incoherent like the teacher on your show...
no-one gets what you're saying, you're the only one that knows..
lol, it'd be a decent punch if he actually was Charlie Brown
hollywoodnt
Aiyo, winnin is easy cause you spit half assed
Lookin like joe camel done ripped in half..
Your opener's just as bad as his
Ill de-feet you, remove the horseshoes from this lucky butt-plug
You gettin drained of stylish flows like bubbles in a model's bathtub.
wack, and tell me you didn't attmept a multi there
Layed out like a persian rug, you gettin stomped on
Kid is fake, like Sean John long john
Sean John long John? I seriously regret reading this
Im grillin this punk...he's gonna come out charred,
DNV of all your friends...like barbequeing with retards.
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You cant see lyrically, im strapped wit nines and ill blow a hole in ya ass in unda a minute
Got this bitch wondering..."whats so bad about putting some caulk in it?"
wow your strapped wit nines, man your verse was ass
I seriously regret reading both these verses and both of you deserve a loss in your battle record but I'll vote for hollywoodnt cuz he actually tried but just ended up with a lame verse. Even tho his punches were horrible, they still hit harder. DNV, I guess you had a couple personals, but then you started callin him Charlie Brown which doesn't work. Your verse was hard ot follow and your flow and structure were horrible. Both of you need some serious help when it comes to battlin in front lines.
IIght.. Imma read this battle as i go through with votes.
First DNV
This kid’s tagline says “hi there… I’m new” … and he’s about to get wrecked by a kid name Stu…this ain’t the playground kid what’s the matta for you…like the chick from exorcist I was born to spew
hmm u had a 'good idea' the exorcist can be turned into something good. But the way you put it was wack. That whole line/bar was wack. and horrible structure. Strecthed
Don't mean to make you mad, by Charlie Brown's a fag
Let me put your votes in a bag, paper or plastic?
2lines= 1 bar. this bar was wack
I got cash for life and I feel FANTASTIC
This kids the latest victum…getting his d/r votes right up the rectum
getting it doggy style from snoopy, who's the real bitch....hollywoodnt
you're punches are incoherent like the teacher on your show...
no-one gets what you're saying, you're the only one that knows..
I will stop the break down here. This structure is horrible and hard to read. And your shit does not rhyme, You had no effective punches within this whole verse.You have potential just work on your wording, and everything else. Need mad elevation
Holly's turn..First off better structure not as strecthed..lets see
Aiyo, winnin is easy cause you spit half assed
Lookin like joe camel done ripped in half..
what is this?
Ill de-feet you, remove the horseshoes from this lucky butt-plug
You gettin drained of stylish flows like bubbles in a model's bathtub.
De-FEET is one of the top 10 most PLAYED concepts in text. And YOU couldnt even make it somewhat tight. nice try at a multi tho..i guess
Layed out like a persian rug, you gettin stomped on
Kid is fake, like Sean John long john
LOL..wow..lol haahahahahahahahahahah that was so wack it was funny
Im grillin this punk...he's gonna come out charred,
DNV of all your friends...like barbequeing with retards.
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You cant see lyrically, im strapped wit nines and ill blow a hole in ya ass in unda a minute
Got this bitch wondering..."whats so bad about putting some caulk in it?
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You guys need elevation, There is no doubt. Neither had any good lines. Or anything. So it is hard to base a vote off of. But i will vote off who i think had better ideas. And who Has better potential and that is DNV. Fix your structure work on your stuff greatly and youll both get there.
Vote DNV
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This battle was about equal. Both had punches that werent strong and both had an ok flow, but the thing that lop sided this battle was the name play by DNV. Basically this threw it because there weren't that many personals. So almost a tie with one difference that allowed me to actually vote on this.Good Battle.
Vote:DNV
Hit my battle up if you get a chance...Peace.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=141176
I disagree with the past vote that this battle was equal cause I don't think it was close at all.
dnv - You had no punches in your thing... Charlie Brown is a fag. Umm, ok? So what? You need to work on throwing direct punches that hit.. you had no style, structure, flow, or really anything going for you in this verse so keep elevating and reading other battles. The one in my sig now isn't bad so take a look at that.
hollywood - Not too bad really. The horseshoes thing was some nice wordplay and a pretty hard punch imo. The opener was weak, but it at least was a punch at him. That basically describes the rest of your verse, not hard punches, but punches never the less....dnv didn't even have punches
Vote - hollywood
Please return the favor
Both of you need to elevate and put a little effort into it... the structure was horrible in both verses... hollywood had some punches that landed.. while DNV was just waving his hands around in the air hitting ntohing... i dont even want to talk about the rest... just work on your sturcture then work on the rest....
overall - you both need to elevate... and look at some other battles... but holly takes this felt his verse alot more.... won in most catagories...
vote - Hollywoodnt for accually having some ok punches....
alright lets keep it going, drop a link and ill return.
yeah^ i agree, i think Hollywood actually had some punches that made sense.... ha h aha DNV you need to elevate, actually both of you do, but Hollywood came a little bit harder int his one.. and yes i mean " a little bit" both of you need to elevate, but in this one i think Hollywood took it cuz his punches made sense and actually "hit" beaing the point of a punch....
V/ Hollywood...
PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=141364
Not A Great Battle but hollywood takes this for his better personals and his punches hit harder..neithers structure was great but hollywoods was had a slightly better flow and was more complex..
Vote..Hollywood..
Return The Favour...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=141306