12 lines
30 mins.
you 1st.... yeuh!
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12 lines
30 mins.
you 1st.... yeuh!
Visions of Toppled Turn Tables… 1's N 2’S gasping for air//
Uproot the Naked Truth… Raking and leaving his soul Bare//
Burn down his Neighborhood… Unite him with Mr. Rogers//
Expose this jokers secret… Like I broke into his Locker//
Sweep your rymes under the Carpet… Lysol to hide-the-stench//
U part of Wack Mc All- Stars… but only ride-the-bench//
Having Shoulder Problems… So I’ll separate it from your body//
Drop your jaw-in… Its Murder like he signed with Irv Gotti//
Pop and Lock- tin… the glock pointed at this out of control teen//
U sweating losing Weight… making his front- Rolls-Lean//
Bat an eye at me… and I’ll Swat this Cat Past the Fence//
Leave you lookin stupid Like an iraq in an american Trench//
aight ur turn ta drop man
checkin in...........................................
Johnny c's you're not too great... you're not at all impressing...
cuz ya raps are incomplete... like a salad wit no dressing.
an this i'm stressing: you couldn't bring the heat if on fire...
and you're about as wanted... as a fat hooker for hire!
but how do you feel??? do ya not want me to know it???
it's okay, i know you're scared... yer name fuckin showes it.
you say ya b-day's in '85*... and that you're 16*...
"Make Up" your mind... i'd do it for you, but that's up to Mabeline.
you're a fake... i see through you, like you're a chain-link fence
and i just smoked you in this battle... as if i was French.
you might think that you'll beat me... son, you're just not able...
you say that YOU'RE the dj*, yet I'M turnin the tables!
*refrences to his profile/ bio.
Nice battle, Petrafy.
let's get some votes!
uppin 1.............. c'mon, ppl, vote please........... i'll return the favor.
Nice battle...
Petrafy-You had good concepts in your verse. It was witty and pretty strong. Good flow, structure could have been better. I liked what you had to say, but it wasn't personal enough for me.
Johhny C.-You had good concepts also. It was wittier than his, and you had some nameplay, which worked for you. Flow was good. Structure was okay. But you took this with punches and personals, whereas he only had punches.
thanks alot, dude. uppin2...... cmon, how bout some votes! i'll hit ya battles up wit an honest vote............
Flow- Not really a problem for either of you so...
Punches-Pet: Your punches were a lot harder than Johnnies. You were more creative with your punches.Those were you best punches.Quote:
Sweep your rymes under the Carpet… Lysol to hide-the-stench//
U part of Wack Mc All- Stars… but only ride-the-bench//
Having Shoulder Problems… So I’ll separate it from your body//
Drop your jaw-in… Its Murder like he signed with Irv Gotti//
Johnny:Your punches were ok but none of them really stood out to me.That was ur best punch. The rest of your punches wern't really creative or have any meaning to them like the salad dressing one.Quote:
you say ya b-day's in '85*... and that you're 16*...
"Make Up" your mind... i'd do it for you, but that's up to Mabeline.
Personals- Both of you were lacking in this department.Petrafy u didnt have any and johnny, u only had one good solid one.Voacb- Petrafys vocab seemed to be more polished up then Johnnys. By no means do i give a decision on vocab tho.Quote:
but how do you feel??? do ya not want me to know it???
it's okay, i know you're scared... yer name fuckin showes it
Originality-Petrafy edged u out johnny.He seemed more creative with his punches. I coulda found punches similar to urs in a lot of other battles.
Overall- Pertrafy edged this out with his punches and originality. His punches seemed like they had an overall meaning behind them.
Petrafy-7/10
Johnny-6.5/10
yo im upin on this shit thanks for tha votin keep it up nice battle johnny
petrafy
Visions of Toppled Turn Tables… 1's N 2’S gasping for air//
Uproot the Naked Truth… Raking and leaving his soul Bare//
7/10...nice wordplay...
Burn down his Neighborhood… Unite him with Mr. Rogers//
Expose this jokers secret… Like I broke into his Locker//
5/10...filler
Sweep your rymes under the Carpet… Lysol to hide-the-stench//
U part of Wack Mc All- Stars… but only ride-the-bench//
7.5...nice shyt doggy..
Having Shoulder Problems… So I’ll separate it from your body//
Drop your jaw-in… Its Murder like he signed with Irv Gotti//
6/10....good but played...
Pop and Lock- tin… the glock pointed at this out of control teen//
U sweating losing Weight… making his front- Rolls-Lean//
5/10...filler...
Bat an eye at me… and I’ll Swat this Cat Past the Fence//
Leave you lookin stupid Like an iraq in an american Trench//
6/10...weal punch
overall - 6.83, good shyt,
johnny c.
Johnny c's you're not too great... you're not at all impressing...
cuz ya raps are incomplete... like a salad wit no dressing.
6/10...weak punch
an this i'm stressing: you couldn't bring the heat if on fire...
and you're about as wanted... as a fat hooker for hire!
[b]6.5....alright...[b]
but how do you feel??? do ya not want me to know it???
it's okay, i know you're scared... yer name fuckin showes it.
7/10...good shyt
you say ya b-day's in '85*... and that you're 16*...
"Make Up" your mind... i'd do it for you, but that's up to Mabeline.
7/10...nice wordplay...
you're a fake... i see through you, like you're a chain-link fence
and i just smoked you in this battle... as if i was French.
4/10...weak, was hot till this..
you might think that you'll beat me... son, you're just not able...
you say that YOU'RE the dj*, yet I'M turnin the tables!
7/10...nice punch
overall - 6.35...again good shyt...
good battle, but petrafy took this...
link in sig, already got a vote from jc..
Damn good battle
Petrafy...i think that u had a very good verse. You had a good opener and closer. That was the main thing that u had goin for u in this battle that gave u points. U had a nice set of personals eventhough some of ur concepts were played. U didnt have hard hitting punches eventhough i liked the IRv Gotti line...that was hot. The structure was okay...it could have been better.
Overall...good verse...more punches
Johnny C...i was very impressed.
You also had a good opener and closer. But ur opener and closer just made it even harder for Petrafy to win this battle. You had a variety of personals, I also liked the wordplay with ur name. the punches that u used for cool....especially the Mabeline line...that was a killer. I like the structure and the flow
Overall...u will be hot when u reach ur peak of elevation
vote...Johnny C.
Petrafy-
Visions of Toppled Turn Tables… 1's N 2’S gasping for air//
Uproot the Naked Truth… Raking and leaving his soul Bare//
-weak opener. made it so i didnt really wanna read the rest 2/10
Burn down his Neighborhood… Unite him with Mr. Rogers//
Expose this jokers secret… Like I broke into his Locker//
-alright wordplay no punch 4/10
Sweep your rymes under the Carpet… Lysol to hide-the-stench//
U part of Wack Mc All- Stars… but only ride-the-bench//
-nice punch riden the bench was good. 7/10
Having Shoulder Problems… So I’ll separate it from your body//
Drop your jaw-in… Its Murder like he signed with Irv Gotti//
-what? shoulder problems??? bad punch 4/10
Pop and Lock- tin… the glock pointed at this out of control teen//
U sweating losing Weight… making his front- Rolls-Lean//
-alright word play. 5/10
Bat an eye at me… and I’ll Swat this Cat Past the Fence//
Leave you lookin stupid Like an iraq in an american Trench//
-not a bad ending 610
overall: i thinkur punches could have come harder, but good wordplay
Johnny C-
Johnny c's you're not too great... you're not at all impressing...
cuz ya raps are incomplete... like a salad wit no dressing.
- haha thats some raw shit. nice opener. salad with no dressing 8/10
an this i'm stressing: you couldn't bring the heat if on fire...
and you're about as wanted... as a fat hooker for hire!
-another nice punch. 7/10
but how do you feel??? do ya not want me to know it???
it's okay, i know you're scared... yer name fuckin showes it.
-nice punch but u rhymed "it" with "it" so 6/10
you say ya b-day's in '85*... and that you're 16*...
"Make Up" your mind... i'd do it for you, but that's up to Mabeline.
-alright punch 5/10
you're a fake... i see through you, like you're a chain-link fence
and i just smoked you in this battle... as if i was French.
-weak punch didnt really hit. 3/10
you might think that you'll beat me... son, you're just not able...
you say that YOU'RE the dj*, yet I'M turnin the tables!
-all i can say is WOW. nice ending man. this was the best line of ur rap 10/10
overall: this stuff had me laughin the whole time. had nice use of word play
petrafy u had some good stuff but johnny c tore it up in this battle
Vote:Johnny C
Petrafy- U did an overall pretty good job. THe biginning was a good start. I also like the ending about an iraq in an american trench/good ending. However u didnt have as hard and as many good punches as jc. U did use pretty good wordplay that helped u in this battle.
JC-overall a good performance and sum good wordplay. The opener was pretty good. THe fat hooker for hire was a solid line. noticing that his birth date was on 85 and that hes only 16 was a good find. The ending also had good wordplay and was a good finisher. U over all had much better punches and good wordplay. with this being said
vote=johnny C.
Eh.. kinda a weak one.
Petrafy..I dunno what these people are talking about with having nice personals.. no offense, but I saw.. none? Structure and the flow were working though, nicely done there. Punches were pretty general, nothing really stood out. Overall, decent verse.. next time, IMO, focus on real personals, cus thats what wins battles, at least to me :)
Johnny C..Wasnt too bad, er, liked some of your ideas you had, especially closer, that hit hard. Good personal turnaround. Opener was alright, good concept, just kinda hit weak..re-wording and throwing a personal into that woulda been tight. Ditto on flow, nice.. structure was kinda choppy in a couple parts but solid overall.
Vote - Johnny, simply for having hard hitting personal(s).. it was pretty much a tie other than that.
-Hollllla