Love Like This

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Straight from my demo. Here's the lyrics to the song. The chorus is actually a sample. Here's a real love song for all of you emotional people. Enjoy.

[Verse One]
Was a jewel in the dirt, a ghetto chick, but no acta
heart goin fasta, present Cleopatra
my hobbies didn't matter, didn't care that I liked this
Liked that I write this, she's what my dream wife is
met her at the theatres, she was lonely, a seeker
wanted a real man, her ex-man was a cheater
emotions she was showin, a connection was growin
ignorin the foolish teens and their popcorn throwin
Walkin down the sidewalk, street lamps make glares
at night, the dim light, show her smooth, black hair
walk her to her front steps, press a peck, then her number
wasn't boring like others, called her right before slumber
Layin on my bed, feelin special what we had
dialed her digits without lookin at the phone keypad
A smooth, welcome voice, we talked through the whole night...
from this point, I knew...that she was my future wife...


[Chorus]
There ain't no love like this
Nobody makes me feel like you do...
There ain't no love like this
Nobody makes me feel like you do...


[Verse Two]
Invited her to the park, calm afternoon stroll
down hill, kids roll, green grass bein mowed
Not a cloud in the sky, not a single distraction
Grasped her hand in mine, a smile was her reaction
finally, a woman I could spend my life with it
excitement she brought forth, dam I liked it
ego wasn't too tall, she liked me after all
no woman purposely misses her cell phone calls
talked more to make bondage, found she had knowledge
Sixteen and already had planned to go to college
Intelligent and serious, my queen, she's precious
her message, I knew that she'd love me relentless
lookin into her eyes, they were calm and welcome
she stared back, her hands on my leg, I felt em
true feelings for a woman, I never pictured this
witnessed a real heart...for my first true kiss...


[Chorus]
There ain't no love like this
Nobody makes me feel like you do...
There ain't no love like this
Nobody makes me feel like you do...


[Verse Three]
Too many hoes nowadays, a good girl is the rarest
she was the type of woman I would show to my parents
Her name made me smile, she had a sense of humour...
But all of that changed once i started hearin rumours...
Affectin my dome, she wanted to be alone...
Don't give me your machine, when I know you're at home
Didn't believe what I was hearin, it was getting to my mind
Things really start to stick once you hear it many times
she denied it, called me on the phone, even cried about it
told me that she loved me, but I just wasn't buyin it
saw she was depressed and stressed, and I was too
but I hung up the phone, when she said that "I love you..."
a red heart stricken, the rumors made me sicken
But I still loved her, so when she called, I listened
she said we needa talk, so I asked where to met her...
This was a fresh beginnin, so we met at the theatre...


[Chorus]
There ain't no love like this
Nobody makes me feel like you do...
There ain't no love like this
Nobody makes me feel like you do...

This was cool. Everyone has there twist on the topic. This was pretty tipical for it. Flow seemed straight. Everything was cool. Nothing great, but not wack either. Pretty average. I'de love to hear the song. Text doesn't do real songs justice, seeing as how I can't read your delivery, energy, voice etc. Anyway, post up the song one day. Keep doin' you, homie.

-W1

That was kickass, its funny how all these new people start showing up and they be puttin kick ass open mics. Props man, i'm surprised nobody left any feed back. The flow was alright, the structure was alright, but the piece had alot of emotion so that mwahts really made this piece great.

[My Thoughts]
Nice drop. Description was nice I like a good descriptive piece. Topic was nice. I started reading the last verse an I was like NO your going to mess it up then it wouldnt be a nice love song but you fixed it.