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The Ghost
Check it...
I write dope rhymes that will thrill minds
Slide out lethal nines that will bite lives
Drop shots that'll blow cops off the block
Lock locks that'll stop 'n' hold a cyclops
I've done alot to reach the lethal level that I'm in right now
Even if you had Bush's army, you still can't take Kahn down
Nothin' can harm me, I move faster than the speed of light
I'm a ghost, i'll bring nightmares to ur peaceful sleep at night
You prolly could've merked me before, but now i've elevated
Shit i don't have to conquer ur loss bitch, i'll fuckin create it
Put you down on ur knees, watch u bleed, hear ur last words
Then go for my next goal, to rule and conquer planet Earth
I'll rap circles around you, till u start wonderin what happened
I'm a mystery, and this mystery evolves, as I continue rappin'
I write dope rhymes that will thrill minds
Slide out lethal nines that will bite lives
Drop shots that'll blow cops off the block
Lock locks that'll stop 'n' hold a cyclops
Here are the links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130500
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130609
Peace :thumbup:
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this was a tight verse about you...man u got to live up to this though...it had very good word play...man u stayed on the topic...thought that the verse was okay...i enjoyed it lots.KEEP WRITIN'...watch out many men just might want to battle you now...or laugh at you...though this verse was tight.
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I'll Give U Sum FeedBack Cause I Hate When People Don't FeedBack On My Shit. I Liked It. Maybe My Opinion Ain't Worth Dat Much Cause I Ain't Been Rappin Too Long But I Liked Da Part About Nightmares In My Peaceful Sleep.
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Nice piece, flow was great, concept wasn't the most creative (but hell, who cares?), title could have been better but overall, great piece!
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Thx for the feedback...
Uppin'...
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eh..I didn't like this a whole lot...
simple rhymes...less than average flow...and content that was kinda iffy...nothing stood out at all...I didn't catch any good lines...word usage was decent tho..I give it a 5/10...coulda been better but not horrible..
peace
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130845
^ return the favor
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that was tight i like da rymes man that was hot
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Thx for the feedback...
Will hit links later.
Peace
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Need more feedback.
Peace
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yea dis was iight..... structure was decent.......flow was iight...... content was iight......everything else was pretty average........
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bro you gotta get more creative..
I'm faster then the speed of light, what is that?
anyone could say that, you gotta make your rhymes your own kid...
you could say something like...
I come quick like the future..
make people think... the future might be far away, but the future is also the next milisecond in time...
thats all the advice Ill give you, cause that is what you really need to work on, your flow as nice though...
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^^Aight thx for the feedback dawg...
