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Man's hipocracy
In twined with the divine churches and steeples swallow liberty from the people,
Hypnotic faith of the weak minded and feeble suggest alternative alter ego,
Illusions of truth and reality differ like mirage driven immortality,
Miracles preformed in informality projects a mages analogy,
On the canvas of manipulated minds preachers turned teachers paint a story of biblical times,
People worship mortal written lines while the religions condemn scientific finds,
Politics and social structure weave into a materialistic need to achieve,
Sins of those who conceive search but do not question what they believe,
Enigmas frighten any mortal subject humans only suppress fear with fantasy inject,
A journey of pain and anguish reflect a incognito version of hell for those who critically inspect,
Ignorance of the civilized race foretold god with a picture of a homosapien face,
Retrace the Spanish inquisition to tradition enrooted to the start of the christen religion,
Segregated from those who underwent circumcision holy leaders conducted soul incisions with precision,
Envision a population of self enlightens freedom from statues of titans,
Freedom from the reapers frightens
I did two replies, setting the example
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...64#post1357464
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=125598
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Nice piece here mango .. Dope inners with consitency .. Good content .. Nice read .. Read it quicker than I thought I would .. It just flowed nicely and made for the better read .. Keep writin' Sun .. One
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Wow....Very nice piece here man....The internal rhyming was awesome, it was one of the things that really stood out to me when I was reading through this piece....It really made the piece flow so well together I thought....Had some very nice vocab through out this piece, another good thing about this, didnt really over do it with vocab either....But overall man nice piece...I Enjoyed it.
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nice drop - vocab was quite good - flow was good with the internals - but seemed a little unbalanced in places - content was well written - pretty persuasive - seemed to end abruptly - would have liked to see just a few more lines at the beginning as you got into your topic and a few at the end to kinda sum things up - but very nice work overall - hit me and Formula's collab called "Unwitting Suicide"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126143
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word thanks for the feedback, not just people postin a few lil lines
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