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[ My feelings ]
I sit and contenplate My ignorence To this world
But cant consentrate im hipnotises vision swirld
Contacting my Iner strength to feel this momentum
A sudden lenght to go to here I come
A vision of savour of tho's traped im them selfs
A parturn of substainal behaviour unique like elfs
I stare into my soal and soal search to sray a picture
Turnin' darkness to light as it takes toll indesent picture
Runin' blood cold as i spit cold blood spitin' invein'
Resisted Pain to feel this glory as i spit shit insain'
Livin' every sylibol dat drips from my jaw,
lyrcial to an extent dat they dont battle me anymore.....
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learn to spell........ but other than that, shit was decent, nothing great, out of this world type of shit, just decent
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uppin for more feedback....
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this was ok, too short to actually become anything tho imo
and big ditto, use spell check or some shit... yo spellin was horrible lol(don't take offense to this, just statin)
overall, it was decent, nothin great, but decent.. keep elevatin
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pretty good.. lol at learn to spell.. nothing really stood out to me.. but nice nonetheless.. you will elevate.. 6/10
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Short and complicated,
good vocabulary . . . good concept!
I stare into my soal and soal search to sray a picture
Turnin' darkness to light as it takes toll indesent picture
^ you rhymed picure twice....
Runin' blood cold as i spit cold blood spitin' invein'
Resisted Pain to feel this glory as i spit shit insain'
^ best line
I wanna see more open mics from you :thumbup:
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Flow was pretty good - Had a few bugs but you wove the words together nicely - Vocab was nice but like others mentioned your spelling was abysmal - content was ok but piece seemed short - keep writing - hit my SS: Black & White or Breathless
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u have vocab and an ok flow but I suggest u listen 2 everybody else and elevate it was ok it could of been better if it was longer and if u fixed some lines never RHYME OFF THE SAME WORD it makes your piece look bad I'm just tellin u from experience!
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