NeW ChiK PeEp ThA SkiLLz

when it comes to crews u wont find nobody hotter/aint no way you can compete, so dont even bother/bitch talks shit? i already got her/her girls wont even recognize her the next time they holla/hoes get sick of us/cuz they cant get rid of us/its so conspicuous/tricks wanna b like us/but hoes they gon' fuck/and chickenheads they gonna suck/too bad bitch ya outta luck/cuz i just robbed ya kicks and now ya stuck/they say bri skee she comes out wit the hott shit/who dont kno bout me, u seein me pop shit/im walkin down the street im seein u drop ya shit/now u lookin for police just so i wont knock ya shit/ppl think that a chik cant hold her own?/i aint one of them bitches who talks shit on the phone/ill have a chik cryin on her knees even if shes full grown/and im sayin trick please just crawl your bleedin ass home...

old shit but well see wats good!

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Work on your structure...dont put it like that, try line on top of line, it usually works better.

iightcho good lookin out even tho im still confused bit its strizz

when it comes to crews u wont find nobody hotter/
aint no way you can compete, so dont even bother/
bitch talks shit? i already got her/
her girls wont even recognize her the next time they holla/
hoes get sick of us/cuz they cant get rid of us/
its so conspicuous/tricks wanna b like us/
but hoes they gon' fuck/and chickenheads they gonna suck/
too bad bitch ya outta luck/
cuz i just robbed ya kicks and now ya stuck/
they say bri skee she comes out wit the hott shit/
who dont kno bout me, u seein me pop shit/
im walkin down the street im seein u drop ya shit/
now u lookin for police just so i wont knock ya shit/
ppl think that a chik cant hold her own?/
i aint one of them bitches who talks shit on the phone/
ill have a chik cryin on her knees even if shes full grown/
and im sayin trick please just crawl your bleedin ass home...

Aside from having a fucked up structure, no wordplay, no metas, and no style.

I guess this was ok.

For a newbie.

Peace

Not good...
Work on everything, and I mean every aspect of writing

Umm stick with it I guess?

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