drunken vs godfather(2)

iight lets go kid....19 lines max..no crew/d.r votes/

ima spit first..yo check it


why you came out here for ..a piece of cake/

cause i,ll write this all over my sig like a birthday cake/

u may have alot of post but you don,t scare me/

cause when ever i go to your house..your moms can,t bare me/

i think she like my style or the 9 on my waist/

it,s iight i already told her the shells is going to her son,s face/

you wanna..come out and be hard in a real life situation/

ain,t my fault you can,t handle 75 shells while im out on vacation/

point your dirty finger at someone else/

or else find your bitches panties at my house next to the shelf/leave you in church looking like mase/

nigga face was pussy,looking like o.j during the murdering case/

so kat before u spit,think about the game/

cause i,ll have you broke saying some of my labels names/

like you alicia keys dog and you don,t even know me/

cause i,ll be the biggest nigga at your house like the lawyers with kobe/

mibad..the first line was suppose to be this..

why you came out here for..to prove you fake?...

NOT THIS LINE
why you came out here for a piece of cake

My Verse for the win

I armed wit flames, I can go forever spittin-raw fer dayz//
like Anfernee this kid is gonna have to learn tha Harda-way(think about it)//
u suck and get fucked, in battles and by other faggots//
But wins for me are like AK's these days, fully automatic!//
like Homade Costumes, i cant tell who ya Tryin ta be//
but spittin Pre Writs, you only Buckin Yaself, like Dollar-Machines//
my words got you Drowning in Rivers, cuz you Dying-to- See(sea)//
Obviously,you wack and ya lyrics aint Applyin-ta-me//
this cats jokin, bout to get his back broken when caps leave the gat smokin//
he's like a window in a hot room gona be left cracked open//
u must be trippin out, cuz like tippin cows ur provokin beef//
but im like the corner store thats 24/7 open G, u cant get close to me(think about it)//
n u stepped to this challenge, r u sick-g? tryin to risk-me?//
im like im ur "bloody nose", i make u wish u never "picked-me"//

Yo G/L uppin for votes

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Drunken...no need to space your lines...get rid of the //....you flow was off and youe punches and metas and personals were all weak....played conceptes and basic rhymes...try and add a bit of complexity and wittiness...be creative and original

Godfather(2)...decent verse...lose the // and even out ya lines...ya flow wasn't the greatest either...you had some OK punches...But you spent a lot of time talking about how good you are...thats filler....focus every line on a punch or personal or meta

Vote Godfather(2) for harder punches

Please drop an honest vote here..thanks http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=120685

Drunken - Your verse got boring becos it had no good punches and all the rhymes where simple and one sylables. Flow was ok but structure was bit off and metas were crap.

Godfather - A was feelin this verse, it was really nice. It had really good metas and some good punches. You had quite a bit of filler but you had good personals. Last two lines were good.

Vote- godfather cos he ad better punches and personals

uppin 2

overall battle pretty weak
'godfather ..took this battle easily...
god father:
But wins for me are like AK's these days, fully automatic!//
like Homade Costumes, i cant tell who ya Tryin ta be//
but spittin Pre Writs, you only Buckin Yaself, like Dollar-Machines//
my words got you Drowning in Rivers, cuz you Dying-to- See(sea)//
^^blah good stuff

line from drunk:
,s iight i already told her the shells is going to her son,s face/

you wanna..come out and be hard in a real life situation/

ain,t my fault you can,t handle 75 shells while im out on vacation/

point your dirty finger at someone else/
^^ blah u suck^^

breakdown:
flow:god,
structure:god
multies:none
punhclines:god
opener:none, no one had anything good
closer,:god, thought it was okay
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vote.... goes ...to godfather(2)

had better punhclines...better structure...
...and drunken u need to elevate son ur rhymes are wack
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why you came out here for ..a piece of cake/

cause i,ll write this all over my sig like a birthday cake/
^^^ wow i rest my case ^^

Whoa!!!

Drunken - i think you was drunk when you dropped that.. the line spacing? wtf.. that was sensless. You had 0 punches from what i seen, no personals neither.. Dont get me started on structure. Your rhyme scheme was original.. to easy..

GodFather(2) - you came aight. verse could use work.. Also so could punches, personals, multies, and wordplay. You came pretty easy, but you got this no doubt.
Nothin else really to be said.. Elevate man

V/GodFather(2)
Simply came better
had punches + more


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=121004

haha..iight i tripped on this battle..good battle godfather..

uppin for votes

flow:god
structure:god
multies:none
punhclines:god
opener:none
closer,:god
vote= godfather(2)


Please drop an honest vote here..thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=120413

uppin for votes for the fourth time

there r no quotables in drunkmasters verse.......dont put spaces and the // in ur lines....thats newbish as fuck.......overall ur verse wasnt that good......bad structure......flow fell off....no metas.....no wordplay......ya punches werent directed at him, and none of them connected........no personals....

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Godfather(2)

but spittin Pre Writs, you only Buckin Yaself, like Dollar-Machines//
my words got you Drowning in Rivers, cuz you Dying-to- See(sea)//

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^^^i think those were ur two best lines......good meta.......wordplay was tight...punch was ok.....overall ur verse was pretty good.....get rid of - - between words, thats also newbish.......ur structure was good......u had a pretty nice flow.......tight metas....wordplay shined in this........some of ya punches connected hard.......ok personals.....

conclusion - godfather takes this battle in a landslide........he had a better structure, flow.....more and better metas.......tight ass wordplay......godfather had more punches and personals......the other cats verse was pretty much all filler......so basing off of that godfather gets my vote.....

VOTE - GODFATHER(2)

yo ill come back and poll this once at least one of u leaves an honest vote in the battle in my sig......

but look dough can i get some poll votes on this damn battle

i would if ud go poll the vote u dropped in my battle........