Saint Louis' Finest

:thefinger This song is unfinished but lemme know what you think about the first verse and the hook. Thanks.

Saint Louis' Finest

Verse 1:

It's no contest, I'm the best from the midwest/
I'm iller than cancer, and sicker than sperms with syphillis/
emcees easily get defeated, you'll get beat whichever way suits ya beat/ I'm more intense than automatic bullets to ya chest/I'm thru with the mess, put a bigger hole in you than jupiter/ and if you look in my eyes, you see I portray the image of lucifer/ I'm cruel to ya, y'all know that I'm not to be fucked with man/ type to enroll in the army to put a bullet in uncle sam/ I'ma stay at the top, all y'all wack faggot rappers get dropped/ my metaphors have ya heads spinnin' even faster than tops/ my tag-teams are hot/ people wanna test the best emcee, but they'll soon cease to breathe when they all get blasted and shot/
my raps are the bomb, you know I talk it, walk it, and pop it/ cuz all my rhymes explode off the tip of my tongue like they was rockets/ steadily bringing that hot shit/ don't nobody really wanna fuck with me/ cuz I'm steadily blazing these tazers at all the faggots and wannabe's/

Hook:

St. Louis' finest, we in the building/
causing trouble and harm, mothers lock up ya children/
we say what we mean, and we mean what we say/
So you can think that you ill, but ima be the king for today/
Repeat Hook



This aint finished yet but y'all tell me what you think. Thanx

^I thought NElly was St.Louis's finest..wrong???

forget nelly what you think of the piece?

LOOOL nelly

this piece is aight nothin stood out reppin yo spot to the fullest nice ....contend aight,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

^^uppin

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