..Ancient Rhymes..

Unrolling Tha Scrolls..That Have Been Eaten..And Covered With Holes
Wise Is Holding Tha Poles.. And Spewing Words From Forgotten Souls
Uncoding Inscriptions..Unbelievable Descriptions Said By Patient Minds
In Vacant Times..Get A Taste Of Lines..We Tha Lords Of Ancient Rhymes
Tha Bible Mentions Me..Been Spitting Since Tha Begining Of Centuries
Legendary..Follow Tha Bread Crumbs To Tha Best..And Find Peasantry
With Rhymes That Echo From Room To Room.. In And Out Of Old Tombs
Just Tha Scent Of Them..And You'll Pass Out From Their Lyrical Fuems
Nobel Prize Winning..Covered In Blue Ribbons..With Intelligence Giving
Clues For Searching Trails Of Lyrics Uncovered That Were Once Hidden
Revealing Directions Pointing To Tha Flow..And Sounds Going Straight
Into Future Minds..Giving Them Hints To Create Words Collaberating Great
Blowing Tha Dust Off Papers..That Haven't Been Seen..Only Heard Calling
Flowing Perfect With Winds..Moving All Of Tha Lint That Has Fallen
Crawling Up Ya Back..Through Your Mind..And Then Back Down Ya Spine
In To Tha Hands..Thats Giving Life Back Into These Ancient Rhymes

...Keyed this awhile back...just now rememebered about it

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The rhyme scheme started off very nice..

But you lost it.. Only lost the rhyme scheme.. Nothing else..

You had some nice inner rhyming and multi's.. And surprisingly, most of the vocabulary that you used was relevant to the piece..

It wasnt much of a topic that could be elaborated particularly well on.. But you did a decent enough drop..

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deep.....poetical.....rhyme scheme ill....
erm....multi's on top form...wordplay
N vocab immaculate....basically a top
from piece...and this was a while back?>>
Props to ya..

Thos was cool. The flow was aight. I liked the topic. I did something similar a while back. I'm feeling the tone of the work. The only thing that could have been a bit better(in my oppinion) was the rhymes. Besides that, this was a good read. Keep up the good work.

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nice for a keystyle. Flow was good, vocab, etc. Like most keys this seemed to jump around just a bit but I loved the way you ended it:

"Crawling Up Ya Back..Through Your Mind..And Then Back Down Ya Spine
In To Tha Hands..Thats Giving Life Back Into These Ancient Rhymes"

Nice multi's & internals as was already mentioned. Did an ok job capturing the feel of antiquity. Nice work - hit my ELEETE collab if you haven't already. (Two Geniuses - One Mind)

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Flow was great. . . and i liked the whole feel of it
untill ur ending, i think you could of worked on it a
little more. the flow from line to line and the connetions
between them was good. nice key up.

amazing. use of multis made it flow well. structure was good too. my favorite part of this peice was the imagery. you just nailed the topic perfectly. especially for a keystyle.

Pretty ill. For a keystyle I found it alot better. And you did lose the rhyme scheme after a few lines, but never lost focus of the piece..Very nice fam, found this a nice little surprise.

i thought this started off better than it finished... the flow was quick and smooth to start with.... but your scheme seemed to go a bit wierd, not very consistant... your vocab was tight tho, really got alot in, it did seem a bit crowded in places tho, with such long bars... but its a key so..... all in all decent read

Thanks for all tha feedback

Point out tha Bounce

dis was a very well structured piece but at times yo lines were a bit stretched....
u had nice vocab....good internals and multis...
one of the best ive read today

Thanks for that feedback