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Reinvent The Wheel
Reinvent The Wheel
My very heart is lit, until staring into the dark abyss
Starts to hit my heart with bricks, cause art is fixed.
Or at least parts of it, and it is bound not to change
With plots to stain every canvas with blots of pain..
The same-exact blots of pain, which nots my brain
Because things used to be original; used to be new
It used to be true that everyone spews the free juice
Of creativity; it used to be proof of our progression..
Now I just see our regression to sub-par perfection
Of meaningless repetition of what came before us
We; carbon copies of our idles, so fans will adore us
Never mind that it bores us to constantly pore stuff
That has been done, in attempt to get our repore up...
It...The Fixation on idealism has made rap too scary
It is what makes Freeman say “work on vocabulary!”
It’s what makes people say “you need more wordplay”
It makes’em only see rhymes; not what the words say
It’s why everyone writes the same and nothing’s new
It’s why everything you write is them and nothing’s you...
Well I refuse to fit into someone’s vision, cause I want to write a line this long without someone bitching...
I want to not care about structure, and be the violent rupture that causes change...
The huge rupture that causes brains to pause the frame
And be able to recognize that we are not all the same
So fuck your vocab, rhyme scheme and tired concepts
Fuck your small, centered font and lines out of context
Fuck your legends forum & your disrespect to non-vets
Realize, anarchy and individuality is what my Intent is
......This is 100 percent truth from my pen as I spit this
And I know...
You think your wheel is perfect, but watch me reinvent it
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...44#post1232644
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117555
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...58#post1232658
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...67#post1232667
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I like - you came through very strong. Flow was on point - saw a good number of multi's. Vocab was good. Concept was obviously from the heart. I disagree with some of your points but you presented them well. Very nice work - hit my Lamentations if you get a chance.
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This was nice... flow'd quite nicely in ma head, I felt this whole piece, tha vocab came nicely in many places in this spit... tha structure was real hott too, you didn't fall off once... 8/10
up'n
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Liked the flow, love to read these pieces, you're all a great help to let me figure out what this all about...hope i'll learn quick and be able to write things like this coz i really liked thise one!
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yeah, like was said, this pretty much excelled. I like the concept, and the ideas you incorperated were great. Structure was well combined and it flowed quite easily..
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I've replied to ten threads :(
Can I please get some feedback?...
Thank you :)
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Nice flow. Vocab was there, and i liked the topic. Something i think everyone could relate to. Real Nice. Keep spittin.
~holla if ya hear me
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Nice spit it had some strong meta4s and mutis homie i enjoyed it
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liked this piece alot.......
words used were grrreat, vocab was spot on. Flow...erm, goood..
Not much to say really, nice piece
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Nice piece.
Not amazing but it did show potential to be. Your multis
showed good balance here w/ not an over use or under
use. The subject came quite strong altho your imagery cudda
been better. But it wasn't over lacking but detail
was just short. Your vocab' was also good. Word usage was
picked very well to express ya thoughts.
I was impressed by ya flow here. Ver adequate and rolled
nicely.
Props all around.
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Cool piece man ..
.. the topic ive seen approached before, but you put your own mark on it with this. It was actually a decent read, the flow and multi's / internals etc came off nice with this - and without ruining your content. Reminded me of my old style very much in SS months ago .. you've got a lot of potential here if all of your stuffs at this standard - my main advice would be - DITCH THAT EVEN BAR STYLE. Seriously, thats advice given to me a while ago and it is SO true - all the even bars does for you is makes the piece LOOK nicely presented, the drawback is - it can take away from your content because you sacrifice the piece's depth for how the piece looks. And id rather you wrote something dope with varying bar lengths than something decent with even bar lengths, if you get what i mean? Just write it how it comes naturally, dont care for even lines in your pieces and you will be a fairly good writer given time. You've a lot of potential there man.
Use it. :^)
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