If I .Wasn't. Invisible ft. Koalatee & Auspicious

Auspicious, M~M, Koalatee

I’ve lost sight, I’ve lost sight of flaws
But what’s not right, I haven’t lost it at all
Being a nobody, I wanted everything
But now being a somebody, I want to stop remembering
You dream of what fits, n your fresh to re-act
Or that’s what it is, til’ you have their breathe on your back
A rep to up-hold, somebody elses’ ambitions
Truth never told, but this was life you wish you were livin
Your who’d you’d die to be..back and thru mistakes
Now your only privacy, comes in bathroom breaks
Followed constantly, every move has been tracked
But now honestly, you pray you could take it back
You lied.. because you thought it would help
But your so recognized, you don’t recognize yourself
Like this from now on, n you’ve fought for it
But now you want it gone, n’ don’t know why you wanted it
minds astray, you’d stop at shoulders
n’ from day to day, it’s the same process over
My life could be miserable, for this I am sure
To everyone, I am invisible.. I just live life like I weren’t..

If I weren’t invisible maybe you would see the black n white
N the raps I write wouldn’t just be black n white
Maybe to prove I’m real I’d have to scrap n fight
But I’m invisible…
so they cant censor whats written on this pad tonight.
If I weren’t invisible n you could know its me
Maybe it would be convoluted music, no longer poetry
Maybe I’d have the elders of white America scoldin me
Showin me as a “thug” – There would be no Emcees
I would carry an assumption, that I’m carrying something
And intimidate people just off of the nuthin…
That I carry around. A stereotype always wantin to fight
If I weren’t invisible… I’m most likely carryin a gun or a knife.
But its right. Cuz when you’re seen its more than lyrics
Give you what u have for who u are… then turn and fear it
But I’m the invisible… so what I say now – its nuthin
I love this art... but if invisible, I wasn’t – then fuck it

A controlled crowd’s paroled mouths seem dismayed in this disparity
Whilst the individual remains foolish enough to convey his insincerity
I stand corrected & pallad-faced, amongst both leaders & poets
With nothing to submit, my voice drones & my demeanor is stoic. .
A breeze bites my neck, a tightened check greets the new layers
As they enter the square, a mass euphoria defeats the doomsdayers
An enormous, collective sigh. . Trust, that the pulse was as loud
But not so punctuated, for its noise became engulfed by the crowd
The time arrives, we tried to hide – a willing cast with lassoes. .
Captured minds & hid their souls, whilst the buildings cast the shadows
We were in Times Square, New York - & I shuddered in wealth
For it was a cold, winter day when I had finally discovered myself. .


-III-




Thanks for the view even if no replies...
this is one of my first attempts at OMs.

...surprised this is getting slept on...

agreed...
we did dope.. all of us
whoop whoop

This piece is missing something.....Hmmm~~~oh yeah.......Me :)

Anywho...this piece made me realize...I need to step my game up...

Aus-First piece I read from you(Other than SS)..I'm impressed!

M~M-I'm glad you were a no show at SS(or else I would've took a L..maybe?)

Koal-Blah~~~~Blah~~~Blah`~~ :thumbup:

<-I was supposed to be in this collab...but I was too lazy to write a verse and I ended up using my verse at SS..Against M~M...LOL

You guys did a 'Fantastic' job :thumbup:

all 3 good pieces...koalatees was a lil' different n didn't seem to fit in as much but also may have had the best verse...it was just more complex n mixed up with that vocab of his
aus is great at throwing in the emotion... always a good read & this was a good few lines from you.. ur flow..is just something i can relate to when i'm reading it
MM nice job my man
here's something i loved and other people fail to feel the right way about it...

If I weren’t invisible maybe you would see the black n white
N the raps I write wouldn’t just be black n white

^yes rhyming with the same words...everytime i did that they lacked to see the emotion n emphasis put back behind that... good job... verse connected well

thanx...
I dont know you that well but everytime you
use the same words make sure they have
different meaning. If they dont see the skill
behind that... then its because they dont have
it. Thanx Again.

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WOW... incredible piece... Do not know why you're getting slept on.
amazing... simply amazing :)

nice collab.... first 2 styles were the same
but diff concept of thought...nice shit
good flow nice lyrics vocab

last one was the best...great range
of thought and metaphors...the vocab
was used precicsly

thought it was a pretty nice piece...all three contributing to the topic nicely...aus opened it nicely...MM um yours was good kinda confused me but most likely the weaker of the three......K yours was a beaut i enjoyed it...thought of it as a poem though..but nice nice and nice

done

you have to post two links to feedback you left, or this is closed.
yeah, new old rules again.

Nice piece...
Good read..

2links for sir Maven:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116143

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115818

dis was a pretty dope drop with some good concepts involved in it here and there...jus keep on getting better like you always do........wordplay was also very creative..........................keep up da work.

This was dope guys. . Every verse had meaning and hit the topic on point even with 3 different trains of thought. . flow was perfect in each. . Multi's were tremendous. . Definately helped the flow. . Vocab was incredible in Koalatee's verse. . and just as good in all others. . Mystery, this is the first i've read from you, and you definately put a good impression on me. . Aus, I think i've read from you before, you are good man. . I'll quote my favorite lines from each verse. .

Mystery -
A rep to up-hold, somebody elses’ ambitions
Truth never told, but this was life you wish you were livin
Your who’d you’d die to be..back and thru mistakes
Now your only privacy, comes in bathroom breaks

Auspicious -
If I weren’t invisible maybe you would see the black n white
N the raps I write wouldn’t just be black n white
Maybe to prove I’m real I’d have to scrap n fight
But I’m invisible…
so they cant censor whats written on this pad tonight.

Koalatee -
An enormous, collective sigh. . Trust, that the pulse was as loud
But not so punctuated, for its noise became engulfed by the crowd
The time arrives, we tried to hide – a willing cast with lassoes. .
Captured minds & hid their souls, whilst the buildings cast the shadows

Overall, I must say I liked Koalatee's verse the best, but this was really dope on all behalfs. . great job guys. . Pz.

-Return the favor on my piece. . . "Us". . . . Thanks -

^^^ got mine n Aus's verse mixed up.
But thanx for the view anyways......