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The Looking Glass
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...331post1209331
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115961
Euphoria is a state of mind, designed by thoughts
It aint down to material things, counting the noughts
No… Utopia can’t be enforced, its found not bought
Even with any ‘mount of conversing with influential sorts
Cos temperamental feelings, only reflects it don’t absorb
So what’s the deal then, the mirror don’t lie it’s true to your face
It gives back the real taste, ya can’t fake… its polygraph
You’re its artefact, its exact, its fact… its reality based
Cos the looking glass only lies if its circus placed
The hall of mirrors… distorted face, but that’s unique
Its muffled speech, an obvious faction, but real underneath
So don’t live untruth’s, its profuse to clench and bear your teeth
I like to think I see a citizen that meets… mortality
Don’t mean fitting in, just comparatively acceptable
Cos ya aint delectable if your against the family
Don’t be hysterical, calm your ways, before there’s a tragedy
Let it come back to thee, if it’s gone… embrace yourself
Be firm, clear the condensation and dissipate… heal the burn
Cos shattered panes bring 7 years, its a long time to learn
So in turn don’t scatter flames then you’ll have no concern
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yo kid I liked your work the flow was aight and the vocab needs a little help over
all it's good
my OPEN MIC'S
hate to happyness
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Nice little keystyle Dev. . Flow was on-point. . I was feeling this. . My bad for short feedback, but I can't think of shit to say. . Pz.
So what’s the deal then, the mirror don’t lie it’s true to your face
It gives back the real taste, ya can’t fake… its polygraph
You’re its artefact, its exact, its fact… its reality based
Cos the looking glass only lies if its circus placed
^ ^ Wow. . ill. . for real.
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this was educational...thanks for the lesson man
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i liked this peice. very good usage of vocabulary, and it flowed real nicely. wordplay was outstanding, and that is what definitly catches my eye. theres not really anything bad to say about this peice accept that it was really a good read. only thing i say u work on is your internals, ( if you know what i mean ). but other than that man, i really enjoyed reading this peice. seriously dude. props, and stay up.
if u can, check out my peice " Self-Destruct Sequence ".
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116109
feedback would be appreciated. thanks homie.
peace.
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damnn... nice piece, i liked the vokkab, good multis, all around good drop...nice creativity on the topic
So what’s the deal then, the mirror don’t lie it’s true to your face
nice...some deep shit lokk, stay up
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This shit was WACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)
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Dev another good piece by you. Good vocab that was blened it with the piece well, flowed pretty well. I feel like everything this piece was about got through pretty well even though it lost me a bit in some places. Your good man and keep it up......
sorry for the sort ass reply but its all i could really say:)
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its coo, eki... you read it, which is what im more bothered about....Pen, ya foo......lol....
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edit.....fucking computer fucked up,, posted twice...lol