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Wow..
I loved the opening 4 lines... quite impressive set of content rich lines... really feel the mastery of lyricism...and it goes throughout the piece with only a few places it seemed the vocab has almost over the top... not that i don't like that anyways...
my one semipositive/seminegative comment is that you shuffled from scene to scene and portion to portion rather than a smooth transitions... but the complex internals and multis lend itself to that... sooo.. ima think it's intrinsic the pieces nature...
good stuff like to see a more realized topic but this is interesting to read anyways..
plz return the favour and peep: Sniff n Spliff by Magnificent
^Thanks..and Drop a link...Quote:
Originally Posted by Magnificent
I see still no sign of writters block genious...very good piece again...as well as your first reply the first four lines were very thought out...creative piece...good vocab and what not...the picture your painted was out standing incredible and indepth verses...very complex...it was a good read all the way through...very well done
"Ever heard of Yung's theory of the collective conscious?
It's the idea that we all believe similar selected constants:
society is created from beliefs that we all innately feel
reality is mainly built on what we all have faith is real...
so if I disagree, think separate and let my mind go askew"
^^impressive....keep up the good work...peace
^Thanks rule..I'm humbled... :shocked:Quote:
Originally Posted by rule
Yo homie penskills.....u always got sumtin new to drop n it always comes out dope...damn homie this drop was nuttin but dope, the vocab was on fire, the worplay was hot n the imagery n flow were all on point, no flaw was in this drop in my opinion..keep droppin ur legendary shit n keep spittin..
Peace
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Originally Posted by Magnificent
Nice one hoebag...
:)...
Pz...
fav lines
"L.A.: Where the hopeless walk the creases of the city-fortress
that’re patroled by the Corporation’s Yakuza swordsman,
who carry energy blades and scanners to find enemy prey"
"A decision that his sister, Jasmyn, paid for with her life.
But he downloaded her soul to a chip that he wears at all times"
Hit up mine..frsh drop from de cerebral
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115872
Peace
^Very Gay reply! from very gay guy! (where you been?)Quote:
Originally Posted by Freeman
Unbelievable...the imagery on this was so picture perfect....the vocab and flow kept right on point...one of my best reads ever...keep up the dopeness...drop a vote in my battle... Link : http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112742
Keep up the niiiice work...pz
^ :) .....Thanks for the Nod in legends...Quote:
Originally Posted by Word Definate
Penskills you outdid yourself again. This piece was like the next level and it was fucken genius:) i loved how it opened up... the middle was verse was good two and your use of good vocab but being able to keep it all within a good flow shows your potentional as a writer. You Dev, dez, Freeman, and Baron Mind never dissapoint me with a piece.... so props and thanks for the good read