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Turning your verse impressive, is like turning shut eye to blinks...
With a name that confusing, your avy has needed to think^^
Are you looking for the truth? Well its playing hide and seek...
because it would say...
Your wackness is the size of Mountains if you took time to take a Peak...
Multiple personalities, so you switch from good to evil...
In fact..
You abreviated your own name just to hide Your Ten Egoes..
They say where you come from is how your going end...
Take a look at WA...
...You come from a place named after the dead
It must be hard being you, with no talent, battling risks...
Giving you suicidal thoughts...
...Your skills are almost as dead-cut as your wrists...
wow man im suprised ur punches hit really hard
then again im usually batteling ppl like hot barz
how'd u know my state's named after a dead president
see the psyche ward really does help there residents
damn im dissapointed in my self y did i agree 2 battle u
mom said dont make fun of tards i told her i was through
oh no dude ur thinkin 2 hard please stop the frustration
dont talk about slittin wrists u might give n 2 temptation
i wouldnt be suprised if the kid died of an anurism
if he tells u that hes beatin me its purely fiction
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[2]Quote:
Originally Posted by Junio
Turning your verse impressive, is like turning shut eye to blinks...
With a name that confusing, your avy has needed to think^^
^......that line is pretty confusing but ok..........^
Are you looking for the truth? Well its playing hide and seek...
because it would say...
Your wackness is the size of Mountains if you took time to take a Peak...
......pretty weak punch, decent..... wordplay^
Multiple personalities, so you switch from good to evil...
In fact..
You abreviated your own name just to hide Your Ten Egoes..
^.....kinda weak.....^
They say where you come from is how your going end...
Take a look at WA...
...You come from a place named after the dead
^.....ok, good that you knew that i guess.....^^^
It must be hard being you, with no talent, battling risks...
Giving you suicidal thoughts...
...Your skills are almost as dead-cut as your wrists...
^...nice closer....^
wow man im suprised ur punches hit really hard
then again im usually batteling ppl like hot barz
......^why would u tell him his punches hit hard?...^
how'd u know my state's named after a dead president
see the psyche ward really does help there residents
^......decent punch, saved by the second line.....^
damn im dissapointed in my self y did i agree 2 battle u
mom said dont make fun of tards i told her i was through
^.....not ver creative....^
oh no dude ur thinkin 2 hard please stop the frustration
dont talk about slittin wrists u might give n 2 temptation
^......nice.....^
i wouldnt be suprised if the kid died of an anurism
if he tells u that hes beatin me its purely fiction
^....not a very good closer.....^
well, not the best verses i've read, i know ive read better from you ytegrl...
Junio i thought won this just just for the mere fact that his vocab was better, he had a couple of good punches, his closer for one was nice, he had some more personals
Vote-Junio
every 1 sided battle.
yte grl...punches came very week...no flow...no real structure...and no personals...overall needs work...it was ok, but needs attention...4/10
Junio.....punches came hard but some a pit played....flow was elemntry...but structure was ok....personals were there......overall:7/10
v/junio(simply beta) both keep it up!!!
PLEASE RETURN THE FAVA: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114198
[3]Quote:
Originally Posted by Junio
ite i aint gonna break this down na...cause ive read both and its clear,
yte girl you had no punches attall you used played shit,
your flow was ite but that was just because you used lil,
words wich are wak 2 b honest ma..........your structure was ok,
but no real punches,,...junio not bad man,
you actually had punches that stood out in here,
and hit on personals also manl.............structure came a lil,
streched in places but not bad man nice.....v-j
drop a vote on this plz...............thx...http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113660 ........pz
[4]Quote:
Originally Posted by Junio
[5]Quote:
Originally Posted by Junio
yte girl i see you still havent elevated after being here for so long.....junio took this 1 easily as his verse was a lot better and it looks like he took at lot more time and effort.....yte that verse was wack and u need visit the wackness emergencie centre for help....the only thing you do that is ight yte is your structure....not gonna breakdown no more as it isnt needed so ma vote goes 2 junio.....could you both hit up ma battle wit Lawton in ma sig....
thnx
junio-You had a lil weak punches....But some came hard
Work on vocab.....Nice similies also I like the metaphores
Very understandable but need work on complexity...
WOrk on harder punches and keep elevatin
yte-YOu had some alright punches but junio came
harder......DOnt worry he came a slight harder than ya,
Work on similies and metaphores.....You had the structure
and it was very very easy to read....I liks it....Work on lines
a lil more......keep elevatin and ya will be there
v/junio