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10-14 lines.. drop a.s.a.p (today).. i'll post first if ur not around.. no feedin.. blah blah blah.. u know the deal.. les get it poppin.
..Brummie = someone from Birmingham
..Spahetti Junction = crazy section of motorway in the Birmingham area
..He teaches Jujitsu
..His DOB = December 1986
How could u stand tall wen ur letters dont even stand strait?
heavy use of italic is the closest ull get to 'illtalic-weight'...
puttin ya mouth in the gutta dont make u a voice of the streets
im like diligent road workers.. i leave nothin but clean sweeps...
an to impress peeps, i'll even dress ur corpse myself
seems u were warned too late that battlin's bad fa ya health...
now like early births ur facin a painfully premature departure
cos lines this sharp are sure to start to depart ya...
face facts.. its clear u started off on the wrong leg
crew's listed above The Peasantry.. yet ur the ones who beg...
yup.. ull compare me to a child genius.. in a class of my own
cos i 'fathered' this kid wiv 'insults'.. then left him all 'diss-owned'...
followin this ur style an rep now resemble ur avatar
both are negatives that jus got ripped wiv one bar...
a Brummie mc? please.. id leave u twisted worse than Spaghetti Junction
an teach u more lessons than Jet Li appearin at ur Jujitsu function...
well its over.. im thru.. looks like ur back in December of '86
cos iv slaughtered ur career wiv words swung like double-speed Nix..//
Line limit is 10-20.. but cant edit original post..
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iight...
Thats 18 Lines by my count...
Here's 18 for you...
Peep his...
Sig...
Name...
All that stuff...
Here goes...
Good Luck...
With me your doomed.. You know that 'the threats real'
My verse will leave you breathless...
... Worse than a box wiv an air tight seal
What a fucking bitch.. Even went over the limit he set
This guy is worse than a ghost writer...
... He's just the silhouette
Your name amuses me.. Suggesting your style of text is ill
Thats a mistake jus like your mom...
... when she didnt take her contraceptive pill
Im not catchin your illness.. Your only infected wiv HIV
My punches leave you limp and hanging in everyway...
... similar to a Willow Tree
My style is swift and smooth hitting.. Like a pro golf-stroke
While you admit your a comedian...
... so your style's literally a joke
Your reps slaughtered.. Left you feelin small and diminished
Ive practically made you cry...
... And a havent even finished
Handing you an L regardless.. Dont matter what you say
This merk will be so spectacular...
... that'll RB will demand an action replay
Poppin this idiot.. His head was gettin inflated
Bought you back down to earth...
... And you found out your name's been desecrated
Snappin this bitch.. finished him as easily as a book
Fishin the alphabet for a W...
... that is something you will never hook
ittalic
How could u stand tall wen ur letters dont even stand strait?
heavy use of italic is the closest ull get to 'illtalic-weight'...
nice wordplay, 6/10
puttin ya mouth in the gutta dont make u a voice of the streets
im like diligent road workers.. i leave nothin but clean sweeps...
first line played, second, not too bad 5/10
an to impress peeps, i'll even dress ur corpse myself
seems u were warned too late that battlin's bad fa ya health...
badly worded, 5/10
now like early births ur facin a painfully premature departure
cos lines this sharp are sure to start to depart ya...
first line ok, seond vla, 5/10
face facts.. its clear u started off on the wrong leg
crew's listed above The Peasantry.. yet ur the ones who beg...
nice, 7/10
yup.. ull compare me to a child genius.. in a class of my own
cos i 'fathered' this kid wiv 'insults'.. then left him all 'diss-owned'...
not too bad, second line i wasnt feelin, 6/10
followin this ur style an rep now resemble ur avatar
both are negatives that jus got ripped wiv one bar...
wack, filler 4/10
a Brummie mc? please.. id leave u twisted worse than Spaghetti Junction
an teach u more lessons than Jet Li appearin at ur Jujitsu function...
ok, could of been worded better, 6/10
well its over.. im thru.. looks like ur back in December of '86
cos iv slaughtered ur career wiv words swung like double-speed Nix..//
nice try u didn't pull it off too good, 5/10
overall 49/90
freeman
With me your doomed.. You know that 'the threats real'
My verse will leave you breathless...
... Worse than a box wiv an air tight seal
not too bad, 6/10
What a fucking bitch.. Even went over the limit he set
This guy is worse than a ghost writer...
... He's just the silhouette
liked second line, nice personal, 7/10
Your name amuses me.. Suggesting your style of text is ill
Thats a mistake jus like your mom...
... when she didnt take her contraceptive pill
played, 5/10
Im not catchin your illness.. Your only infected wiv HIV
My punches leave you limp and hanging in everyway...
... similar to a Willow Tree
lol, nice meta, 7/10
My style is swift and smooth hitting.. Like a pro golf-stroke
While you admit your a comedian...
... so your style's literally a joke
wity, again nice, 7/10
Your reps slaughtered.. Left you feelin small and diminished
Ive practically made you cry...
... And a havent even finished
not too good, weak, filler, 5/10
Handing you an L regardless.. Dont matter what you say
This merk will be so spectacular...
... that'll RB will demand an action replay
noh, didnt quite work, 4/10
Poppin this idiot.. His head was gettin inflated
Bought you back down to earth...
... And you found out your name's been desecrated
not too bad, 5/10
Snappin this bitch.. finished him as easily as a book
Fishin the alphabet for a W...
... that is something you will never hook
nice wrdplay, 7/10
using italics in the battle, lol
overall [b]53/90]/b]
my vote freeman
SHIT NICE BATTLE BOTH, THIS SHITS GOING TO BE TIGHT.
ILLTALIC = YOUR FLOW THROUGH OUT THE PIECE WAS VERY GOOD, NEARLY FLAWLESS ALL THE WAY THROUGH AND WENT WELL WITH THE WAY YOU SPIT. 9/10.
VOCAB WAS OK, MAYBE A LIL BASIC IN SOME PARTS BUT STILL DID WELL WITH THE PARTS YOU DID. 8/10. STRUCTURE /STYLE, DID REALLY WELL WITH THE STRUCTURE A NICE PEICE TO READ.8/10. PUNCHES THIS IS WHERE I THINK YOU DID REALLY WELL, YOUR PUNCHES HIT HARD STRIGHT FROM THE START AND YOU ENDED STRONGLY ALSO. 9.5/10
OVERALL 34.5 OUT OF 40 < GOOD STRONG SPIT
FAVE LINE = now like early births ur facin a painfully premature departure
cos lines this sharp are sure to start to depart ya...
.:FREEMAN:. = OK YOUR FLOW WAY ALSO SMOOTH ALL THE WAY THROUGH. 9/10 I THOUGHT YOUR VOCAB WAS A LOT BETTER THAN THAT OF ILLTALIC'S. 9/10 I'VE TOLD YOU DEFORE I LIKE YOUR STYLE/STRUCTURE AND IN THIS PEICE YOU DIDNT DISSAPOINT, IT WAS A JOY TO READ.9/10 PUNCHES, I DIDNT THINK THEY WERE UP TO QUITE THE STANDERD OF ILL'S BUT STILL GOOD NONE THE LESS. 8.5/10.
OVERALL = 35.5 OUT OF 40
FAVE LINE = What a fucking bitch.. Even went over the limit he set
This guy is worse than a ghost writer...
... He's just the silhouette
BREAK DOWN =
FLOW =TIE
VOCAB=FREEMAN
STYLE/STRUCTURE =FREEMAN
PUNCHES=ILLTALIC
VOTE = FREEMAN
I CANT POLL VOTE BUT THATS WHAT I THINK. PLEASE PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOUR AND VOTE ON THE BATTLE UNDER MY SIG.THANKS
SHIT NICE BATTLE BOTH, THIS SHITS GOING TO BE TIGHT.
ILLTALIC = YOUR FLOW THROUGH OUT THE PIECE WAS VERY GOOD, NEARLY FLAWLESS ALL THE WAY THROUGH AND WENT WELL WITH THE WAY YOU SPIT. 9/10.
VOCAB WAS OK, MAYBE A LIL BASIC IN SOME PARTS BUT STILL DID WELL WITH THE PARTS YOU DID. 8/10. STRUCTURE /STYLE, DID REALLY WELL WITH THE STRUCTURE A NICE PEICE TO READ.8/10. PUNCHES THIS IS WHERE I THINK YOU DID REALLY WELL, YOUR PUNCHES HIT HARD STRIGHT FROM THE START AND YOU ENDED STRONGLY ALSO. 9.5/10
OVERALL 34.5 OUT OF 40 < GOOD STRONG SPIT
FAVE LINE = now like early births ur facin a painfully premature departure
cos lines this sharp are sure to start to depart ya...
.:FREEMAN:. = OK YOUR FLOW WAY ALSO SMOOTH ALL THE WAY THROUGH. 9/10 I THOUGHT YOUR VOCAB WAS A LOT BETTER THAN THAT OF ILLTALIC'S. 9/10 I'VE TOLD YOU DEFORE I LIKE YOUR STYLE/STRUCTURE AND IN THIS PEICE YOU DIDNT DISSAPOINT, IT WAS A JOY TO READ.9/10 PUNCHES, I DIDNT THINK THEY WERE UP TO QUITE THE STANDERD OF ILL'S BUT STILL GOOD NONE THE LESS. 8.5/10.
OVERALL = 35.5 OUT OF 40
FAVE LINE = What a fucking bitch.. Even went over the limit he set
This guy is worse than a ghost writer...
... He's just the silhouette
BREAK DOWN =
FLOW =TIE
VOCAB=FREEMAN
STYLE/STRUCTURE =FREEMAN
PUNCHES=ILLTALIC
VOTE = FREEMAN
I CANT POLL VOTE BUT THATS WHAT I THINK. PLEASE PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOUR AND VOTE ON THE BATTLE UNDER MY SIG.THANKS
400+ was specified in the god damned title u chump.. dont drop ur view if u cant poll.
Flow - This was a nice battle and i cudnt decide who really took the flow on this 1 i liked them both good work....
Punches - Both came with punches but illtalics hit harder,Free yours were hard but not as hard as illtalics if u were battlin sum 1 else you wud of takin this...
Personals-Freeman takes this as he came wiv a vary of personals...Illtalic came with sum gud hard personals as well but ti think free took this 1 as his made me laugh...so did illtalics on the other hand but free takes this....
Vocab - Both came with diff kind of vocab but freeman came wit sum stronger so he takes this 1........
Structure-Freeman takes this as i like the way he structures his verse....he makes things stand out by placing them on a line of there won......illtalic there was nothing wrong with your structure but its just i prefer the way freeman has his as he makes things stand out and there more effective this way..........
overall i thought this was a very close battle but i think freeman takes this narrowly............both verses were dope but like i sed in structure freemans verse stood out more than illtalics's gd battle no hate
pz
i think both of you guys dropped some nice verses...many aspects were pretty much tied up, such as you guys overall flow...both verses read nicely..i think freeman took more consistent punches, but Illtalic had the best punch, about being diss owned, that was nice....personals was close but Freeman had that barely...everything else was pretty evenly matched, it just came down to consistency and i'm gonna have to give it to freeman, nice spit by both though.
v/freeman
punchlines- freeman ( i chose freeman in this category because illtalic had alot of lines that were filler.. i didnt really see any hard hitting or clever punchlines in illtalics verse.. freeman had alot of creativity and illness in his punchlines.. like this line "Your name amuses me.. Suggesting your style of text is ill
Thats a mistake jus like your mom...
... when she didnt take her contraceptive pill"
wordplay- freeman ( i felt like freeman came with wittier shit than illtalic.. i just felt like illtalics wordplay was played
mulites- freeman (he had more mulies.. i didnt really see those many or even any at all from illtalics verse)
overall verse consistensy- freeman (freeman came hard throught his verse.. illtalic had only a few bright spots in his verse
overall vote :: i got to give this one to freeman.. i felt like he came wittier.. and had better punchlines and disses thrown in his verse than illtalic did
iight...
Uppin #1...
Lets get this closed now...
Thanks...
Pz...
Gonna give the flow to Illtallic...
Just read better for me, structure was better as well.
Some decent wordplay and a couple of good shots.
Nothing that had me going, "wow"...
But it didn't suck.
Points off for rhyming "departure" with..."depart ya"...
You can do better, man.
But thumbs up for "peasantry/beg"...nice wordplay, good punch...
And props to that "fathered" line, that wordplay was pretty good too.
Decent personals, nothing too exremely effective, but good shots at the avatar, itallics, etc.
Freeman was wittier with the wordplay, used some in almost every diss...
Flow was hampered by the format, but it's not like it was bad.
"Ghostwriter" was ok, played, but nicely flipped.
Same thing with "contraceptive pill"...
The "comedian" line...again, played, but ya managed to flip em and make em sound nice.
Really, for more creativity, and for better and wittier wordplay...
Freeman
But this was pretty close.
Peace