Verses Due: Saturday, January 24th 2004
Voting Ends: Monday, January 26th 2004
Topic: Common Sense
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Verses Due: Saturday, January 24th 2004
Voting Ends: Monday, January 26th 2004
Topic: Common Sense
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It prevails in situations where hesitation enters ya mind
And defined as the times when ya contemplating is it right
Unconfined by boundaries, only reasoning with ya self
Cos you decide is it worth it, is the risk worth the wealth
Its exerted in stealth, unseen, unheard yet part of ya health
What else tells ya fire burns, without needing it confirmed?
It can’t be learned, cos its felt, a response designed to help
And develop awareness so that disaster doesn’t envelope
So life isn’t unsettled, with avoidable problems prevented
Implemented through a voice saying “should I really revel”
“Should this be done”? Or is it the wrong route to embezzle
Cos if ya meddle with the sound of reason ya on ya own
Cos this’s what irons society, prevents the creases from showing
It atones to the expected and the correct way to go on
Controlling people from going that step past the obvious
I don’t condone, its not commodious unless it follows home
Cos like a loan its conditioned, but by ya mind what’s ya own
That tells you whether ya should or shouldn’t perform
The act or the circumstances that ya was thinking bout throw’n
Cos alone it comes down to one factor overlooked, but immense
And that’s the underestimated emotion called… common sense!
We over loap to cure whats left..Tremendous mentions of public thoughts
We gain advantages and manage to hold on skillz that cannot yet be taught
Awaken shaken by such claim..........That my releations been cut short
Theres no re-entry to this place.......Were common senses can be bought
How do we value such importance..........It make me sick to ever think
That drinkin liqour takes me to the brink of being the missing link
But we prevent a sort from happening.Embarassed by this short life sentence
I end existance for one demeanour...How could i lose my public senses
This genetic skill is so tremendous...How could another be relentless
I clench my fist in sudden anger...I lost my soul while jumping fences
For instance one could now be used...No self respect is half his being
No common sense mans hes abused......Hes being extorted without seing
Many situations........................Of diffirent ways how this occurs
Being victim of Conning Fiends....They intervien while stealing purses
You nurse your shame.And shift the blame.At knowing you recently attended
A show that proves that when you lose..You tend to bruise your common Senses
They say your persons inner being...Is diffirent..Meaning where not the same
But being clones without ones senses...Is leaning towards us being lame
Being advanced in many ways...I hope im known.....Being sensualy Common
My culture needs THAT to survive...And being boyant from yhe bottom....
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Good Topical Battle.
I think Dev took this one.
You had a great sence and flowed with the subject very well.
Great imagery. nice story line to it.
You came at it at a slightly different way I expected...which was cool
I enjoyed the starting line...you opened up very good.
Good common sence piece
Big you had a good verse as well i just didnt think it was as capturing. it didnt move me as well as i thought it would have. although it was writtin well and a great aspect of common sence i felt dev just handled it a little better
Close but i'm goin with Dev he just made me think..and really grasped my attention
Vote. Dev
Yeah..Dev had a strong piece, good vocabulary, decent flow and very nice presentation. My only problem is, That you got too into your lines and really made them seem forced which took away alot of the image.
Bigg, You had a nice piece, Your vocabulary not overdone and presenting strong images, and your flow was easy to follow regardless of line length. You got into your emotions a bit too much, some lines felt like they didn't belong and You had a decent ending.
Vote-Tough but Im going with Bigg
i found that both pieces were well written, both had a good flow and vocab.
Dev's piece had a strong impact, but sometimes i felt a bit overdone,and forced, but it made me think thats for sure.
Bigg's piece was very emotional and did a good job showing imanges and describing his views.
all and all my vote goes to bigg
~Tera~
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really nice work guys..
but down to voting..
bigg ez had a really good piece that was easy to follow, with good vocab and flow.. i liked the use of th topic..
dev, your was good but it seemed very simple.. with the vocab and such..
v/bigg - u had a better verse in my eyes that was easier to follow
This is a great battle indeed.
Dev came off with a great flow.. decent vocabulary.. yet at times I also thought some of the flow was forced. A little hard to follow, But twas still a nice piece.. Good work.
Bigg EZ.. Nice flow.. good vocabulary.. Your piece was real easy to follow. Yet it wasn't too basic and simple. Almost a perfect rounded vote.
My vote.
V/ Bigg E Z
Dev's piece was strong..like the approach..liked vocab and flow..dope peice for the topic..
E Z..Had a very interesting approach...so simple yet very complex..it really did catch me..and I loved it..
My vote goes to..E Z..Just thought it kinda rounded off a little different..making it more interesting..
Vote- Dev.....Amazing verses lol....Nice opinions....good flow...everything was on...It seems to me that Dev just made the point better than big....Great battle both of yall...
Vote-Dev
Neek,oracles 04
Bigg wins