Topic : Day & night
100 lines max..u know the rules, no due, drop when ready. = )
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Topic : Day & night
100 lines max..u know the rules, no due, drop when ready. = )
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I'll try to write something tomorrow
Day and night.
From day one it begun love and happiness prevalent
Constant fun reminding me my life was heaven sent
Never beligerent, thanking the lord for seeing each morning
And even with outer influences, my morals were never distorting
Parents were always there to care, giving a life absent dispair.
Seems like utopia as even my country's actions were always fair
And I'll be there for misguided souls, empathizing for how their story's told
Yet my values will never be sold, enjoyed how everyone can have their own
This world must be perfect... with everyone on a write path... the good way
And I must say... that I would never want to see night if this is day
This birth was a curse, constant hurt and what is even worse
Is I have to wait decades to finally experience the goal - a hearse
Stuck in a rut. I mean daily I'm forced to interact with dumb fucks
I wish I could herd these mindless followers into oncoming trucks
Then this shit would be fixed. No more idiots to bore me.
Next step: find a non-idiot to rule this imperialism ridden country
Why do these morons buy into how society forces conformity
Its a bore to me. I mean its sad to the point of borderline comedy
I thought the US was about freedom. Look how they cant even get that right
And if this is the day, I pray to god I can be notcturnal and function at night
This is why I hate days, idiots like you impeding my righteous way.
I'm sorry you feel this. But I pray that you find errors in what you say.
Is this kid gay? I swear the uninformed are a plague to life.
Attacks at sexualty arent nice. But I'll still respect your rights.
You need to up and vanish. Then my goals I can finally accomplish.
What? I cant believe you really believe my existence is worthless.
You have no spine. How the hell are you so much like me?
I wonder that as well. But I guess it proves the minds frailty.
Thats it! I'm taking over 24 hours as I'm the true soldier.
Please just stick to nights, its hard enough being bi-polar.
Hmmz Night & day..
The struggle to get through his feelings exhausted him,
she left, but the feeling remained as in a phantom limb
All this sunshine in his life was , a devotion to his pride?
but the counter glow was being replaced by a rainstorm,
Trickled him to a 'wreck' that kept him hidden beneath his core..
He decided to take a walk...
As he was walking, to this valley, the sun went slowly down..
he saw this mountain expandin valleys with even clouds he couldn’t count,
walked toward to the highest peek saw nothing but this glimmer
A mirror of hope found his shining frown above this snowless winter…
Turns tired, so he sits..
As he sat there thinking, on how to make things change..
warm breaths of wind came over his skin and silence was arranged
Then the moon lit horizons & the sun just turned away..
and inside he starts to realize, me trying just pushed her way…
As the night fell, closing his eyes he made a wish..
He opened his eyes in psychological states,
broke free of memory to figure his fate
Saw some glory and wondered why she went away
Nocturnal activities on arrival when darkness swarmed his way
Struggles were tightened the dark was digging his hearts grave
He held his grip in pure spirit hit the floor his strength gave way
If there was a hope…….Darkness..
The devastation of ultimate doom was apocalyptic
looked like it was over, a done deal as life’s entities transcripted..
SO strong to light the masses with an ecliptic visual sentence
a pale light seeped with curtains of mist consuming the earths moon
yet words remained absorbed & stuck in his throat with wisdom & truth..
he had stumbled by this will-o'-the-wisp beneath his innate roots..
Grabbed a glimpse to see a better view..
Conclusion..
Did he finally find the key to open just a gap to pandora's box
& will the equator be in balance with results of equinox?
I dont know..maybe wishes come true
Fucking fonts dont work!!..Damnit..upper.
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This was a pretty dope topical battle ... I was feelin' the topic ... And both of U took the topic in dope ways ...
Chrit's take was sicc ... A very dope idea on it ... And props on it also cuz I never seen U do a topical ... And it was pretty dope ... I liked the story and how U got it across ...
Edicius took the topic dopely too ... LoL ...Is "dopely" a word ? ... But nah ... I was lovin' his verse ... The imagery was sicc as fucc ... And was written near perfect in my opinion ... I think he topped Chrit in imagery in this topical battle ... And I thought Edicius' verse was better written and structured ... A very dope story ... And a dope endin' th top it off ...
So with that said ... I had to go wit Edicius on this for havin' the dope imagery in this verse and a dope take ... Persoanally I juss vibed wit it more than Chrit's idea on the topic ... Props to both of U on this tho ... Keep em comin' ... Peace
Ok...
Edicius..just great imagry..
Nothing less to say than superb ..
Trapt..Dope ending ..
Just caught me by suprise ..
But after some hard thinking ..
Edicius .. just came perfectly ..
Not saying Trapt ..
wasn't an also great piece ..
This deserves to be a legends I think ..
thnx yall
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edicius done it for me on this one, emotion through the text really shone through on this one, the vocab was really improved on his behalf while trapt came nice (trapt i know who you are! lol) The flow was cool from both, the structure seemed suprising how it was the same, but ah well, edicius takes this on the depth and twists in the lines, respectable battle form both of you..
Pz. V/edicius