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*All rules apply
*All votes must be explained
Hurry Up and drop
Good luck!!!
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Aight Heres Mine...
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Understand It Man...You Dont Want It With Me/
Cuz Your Rhymes make No Sense Like Punjabi Mc"// ~1~
You Fuckin With Me...Ill Make Sure That "Lame" Is Your Title/
Cuz With Raps Like Yours...You Should Singing On American Idol"// ~2~
And If This Kid Says I Suck At Rapping...Yo We Know Hes Wrong/
Cuz We All Know His Style Is Fruitier Than That Ash Kid From Pokemon// ~3~
Ill Fucking School You Bitch...Take Ya Ass To Detention/
I've Seen Your Raps And They Should Be In The Poetry Section// ~4~
You Blow Kid...In This Chapter Im Turning The Page/
Cuz You Probably Get Laughed At More Than A Comedian On Stage...// ~5~
And I Dont Gotta Put Jokes In My Shit To Make People Laugh/
All I Do Is Mention Your Name...Cuz Your A Joke And Thats A Fact// ~6~
Thats Why They Call Me "The Waiter"...Cuz Im Always Serving ellas.../
You Probably Suck So Much It Would Make Your Own Girlfriend Jealous// ~7~
Battling Me Your Straight Stupid...Its Like Bad For Your Health.../
People Aint Gotta Vote...The Laughing Speaks For Itself...// ~8~
Your Probably Saying "Fuck Why Did I Make That Call Out?" After I Accepted/
I Garentee You Read This And You'll Fucking Regret It// ~9~
And If You Really Want My Opinion...Ill Say Your Gay/
Cuz Your +Taking Polls+ And I Aint Talking Bout A Survey// ~10~
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Sorry For The Delay...Had To Write This Shit Up Quick Man You Didnt Give Me Time To Write A Decent Verse...Whatever Heres Mine...
Heres a quike 5min verse for you
Enjoy :)
I’m assuming you like last place, and then a fucking gassed face
my advice...use alot more delete an backspace
to beat me odds are slim, more than anorexics on dexatrim
relapse your every whim, when I snap your neck and limbs
got you shook like a fault line, wishing you could halt time
put your comp in default, unable to assault mine
liquid sword show, slicing through your torso...gruesomely
send you to your eulogy, "half the man" you used to be
I know the way I word this, leaves you biting cuticles nervous
on purpose, I’ll send you to your own funeral service
so stay back, Resident? ...you're always gonna stay wack
cuz I slay cats, like chinese restaurants when I display raps
twist your head like the poltergiest, strangled with a mic device
resurrect your life like Christ, just so I can come and kill you twice
I'm always prevailin so every time you'll be failin
like trying to Crucify yourself, you won't get the last nail in
This batle overwhelmingly goes to Verstyle, win 12! Congrats. Better metas,..ah. had multis! MUCH more complex/better punches.
Frutier than Ash from Pokemon? Come on man, there's nothing to that. Might as well say Frutier than Will and Grace. That's gay man, there has to be some substance to your rhymes.
Anyhow, vote goes to Verstyle. Congrats
This battles a few eons old, vote on it if you will
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=98228
Break Down....
Punches.....Carlos...came too basic......Vers...was complex with tha wordplay..and linking his lines
Flow....Vers...dominated.... It Sounded like a true freestyle...feeling it
Creativity....Carlos came played lines.... but so did Vers....But Vers Also Came with new one...like tha closer
vote-Verstyle
"Sorry For The Delay...Had To Write This Shit Up Quick Man You Didnt Give Me Time To Write A Decent Verse...Whatever Heres Mine..."
^^^i quote this from Carlos,^^^ 1st of all the battle has been set up at "01-06-04 at 07:07 AM" his verse was posted on "01-06-04 at 07:55 AM", there was no timelimit to this battle so he had al lot of time...this only brings me to conclusion that he bit his verse from another site...which the person in that site was giving a sertain amount of time and wrote it quike... the only reasong im bringing this up is because he was never givin a due date..so i dont see why he would say "sorry for the delay" when there was not delay...and he posted his verse only "20 minutes" after this thread was made... My Point has bee provin..Bye
Thank You
peace
Uhh...Buddy If You Dont Believe Me You Can Go Fuck Yourself...You Think I Wont Write A Half Ass Verse In 20 Minutes?...Plus Some Of That Shit Was Pre Written Earlier At School I Aint Biting My Shit Off Nobody I Aint That Lame Man...If You Look At Your Post You Said "Hurry Up Make It Quick I Wanna Get Dis Over With" So Do I Man...i Dont Like Waitin For People To Post Thier Shit Either. So I Complied Man. Now If You Dont Believe That Thats My Verse...Fine Man You Can Get One Of The Mods To DQ Me...I Really Dont Give A Shit Cuz I Know Thats My Shit. Your Call.
its not that i dont believe its your verse, its just those last to lines that made me kinda start thinking..why would he say that...and when said make this quike i didnt mean you had 20min to write a verse..sorry for all the confusion. anyways good verse, dont worry i wouldnt DQ you.. i wouldn't unless i was 100% sure, in this case i wasnt..
Upping #1.. to get honest votes... ........................
Cuz You Made A Call Out And I Accepted...And I Was Hoping You'd Regret it...But I Read Your Verse And Now I Regret it...LoL...Whatever Yo Keep Em Votes Coming. Im Getting Killed...is It 3 Vote K.O Or 5 Vote Or What? Its my First Time Battling On This Site. Im Not Familiar With The Rules. Meh...Im Off To Bed ~1~
uppin this battle to get it overwith
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StraightQuote:
Quoted From Carl0s
Understand It Man...You Dont Want It With Me/
Cuz Your Rhymes make No Sense Like Punjabi Mc"// ~1~
You Fuckin With Me...Ill Make Sure That "Lame" Is Your Title/
Cuz With Raps Like Yours...You Should Singing On American Idol"// ~2~
And If This Kid Says I Suck At Rapping...Yo We Know Hes Wrong/
Cuz We All Know His Style Is Fruitier Than That Ash Kid From Pokemon// ~3~
Ill Fucking School You Bitch...Take Ya Ass To Detention/
I've Seen Your Raps And They Should Be In The Poetry Section// ~4~
You Blow Kid...In This Chapter Im Turning The Page/
Cuz You Probably Get Laughed At More Than A Comedian On Stage...// ~5~
And I Dont Gotta Put Jokes In My Shit To Make People Laugh/
All I Do Is Mention Your Name...Cuz Your A Joke And Thats A Fact// ~6~
Thats Why They Call Me "The Waiter"...Cuz Im Always Serving ellas.../
You Probably Suck So Much It Would Make Your Own Girlfriend Jealous// ~7~
Battling Me Your Straight Stupid...Its Like Bad For Your Health.../
People Aint Gotta Vote...The Laughing Speaks For Itself...// ~8~
Your Probably Saying "Fuck Why Did I Make That Call Out?" After I Accepted/
I Garentee You Read This And You'll Fucking Regret It// ~9~
And If You Really Want My Opinion...Ill Say Your Gay/
Cuz Your +Taking Polls+ And I Aint Talking Bout A Survey// ~10~
Punches were decent
Flow was ok...
Structure was horrible
Decent Verse...
Overall.......14/20
Dope verse...Quote:
Quoted From Verstyle
I’m assuming you like last place, and then a fucking gassed face
my advice...use alot more delete an backspace
to beat me odds are slim, more than anorexics on dexatrim
relapse your every whim, when I snap your neck and limbs
got you shook like a fault line, wishing you could halt time
put your comp in default, unable to assault mine
liquid sword show, slicing through your torso...gruesomely
send you to your eulogy, "half the man" you used to be
I know the way I word this, leaves you biting cuticles nervous
on purpose, I’ll send you to your own funeral service
so stay back, Resident? ...you're always gonna stay wack
cuz I slay cats, like chinese restaurants when I display raps
twist your head like the poltergiest, strangled with a mic device
resurrect your life like Christ, just so I can come and kill you twice
I'm always prevailin so every time you'll be failin
like trying to Crucify yourself, you won't get the last nail in
Punches hit hard
Very amusing..Funny
Structure was better
Flow was good..
Dope verse.....
Overall...16/20
Vote-Verstyle
He came harder in punches
Props to ya verstyle....
CarlOs...come harder next time
And shorten ya lines down
Try to get better structure...
Keep it up.. you'll get better
iight..not a bad battle but heres how it is
BREAKDOWN--
punches-Verse
flow-verse
structure-verse
origanality-kinda both
complexity-verse
sustainment-verse
enjoyment-both
metas-verse
overall-verse
Was one-sided but Verse ya gotta start throwin
harsh personals coz u can only use so much metas
ya verse was aight and all but ya need peeps to go
ooh and ahh at the punches if ya gonna beat some
good peeps on the site.. now that ya got ya wins up
start to battle some good competition pz...
other kid..you had the rite idea but jus stop using //
at the end of ya lines n start thinkin bout ya punches
Props to both pz
appricaited the feedback and the votes..if its vets your talking about B.I.. i have battled plenty...
Yo Ok...this battle was good...and but verse won Because had a more Satainable Wordplay Sequence...
like His Flowed more for having less...words...aight...
and just hit harder when the rymescene is there to...
so carlos had some decent bars but lacked the style part...
so yeah verse wins...aight...
props on both though...aight...
peace...