Ju Fuckin Cacaroach!!!!!

Topics replied 2:
A second chance - Baron mynd
Product of da slums -Lyrikal Jezus
Ney Keystyle -T Lite

This is some shit dat i just keyed with a certain fuckin traitor in my mind....
peep and critique



Thought u was down- neva knew youd be a snake in da grass//
a fuckin clown- 2 my face u fakin shakin my hand//
in my absence come 2 find out- u stabin my back//
Now im at a conflict i dont know how i should react//
U one of my closest friends- my dogg- my fam
on da other hand -i cant jus stand- and let dis shit slide//
Cuz what could happen- is motha fuckas witness it and follow it by example//
i dont know why u think -u can play me for a hoe//
actin friendly 2 my face- but then u shady on da low//
appear out of thin air -when I start flamin my dro//
So FUCK IT!-I have 2 decide 2 sever all ties//
first step of dis process- might be a left to ya eye//
fuck ya back up- ill crack ya- in spite of ya guys//
till i get cuffed up- and stuffed up- for incitin a riot//
Best believe- when i post bail -dat ass is mine//
now ya house- got da worst smell- cuz theres a corpse inside//

i aint sure about this u know...there are some bits where im thinking like yeah dats good u know, but den there are other parts and im thinkin....nah!!

and i didnt really like tha end...should have put more detail into shit man

you need to put 3 links to 3 previous battle that you have read other wise this thread will get closed other than that i really wasnt feeling this at all.. but keep at it kid dont give up, you'll get there aventualy..

Peace

Shoot Sorry i did not see you put the "topic you replied 2" i was looking for links.. that that its my business or anything just trying to help out thats all.. anyways 5 out of 10 is what i rate your peice

umm.. it was iight. it got kinda boring and stuff. i dunno... 6/10

Yo son that was tight and I can relate too lol
flow was tight,vocab was aight and all around good shit
Love the title lol
gimme some feedback on my new one called Baaaad Day
~1~