Satan's Harvest- WoP verse.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v3...der/4Girls.bmp
^the pic this is based on.

Sporadic droughts of pity negated for obsessive regimes,
Scraping of uncaged rage played versus Satan's theme.
Harmonious carnage fuelled by forgotten church lessons,
Dispersing whispers of guilt- cringing psyche compression.
'I strive on this shit' as he climbs the cobble and bricks,
Infernal tools in hand..wire, machete and ice pick.
Phantom through the window, slinking quickly through the room,
Inspired by insanity..coated in the ashes of Hades' tomb.
The collection of kin must die, purified of hellacious sin
Initiation of his dogmatic readings shall imminently begin.
Shadows govern his movement..bounding flickerings of fear
Sulking executioner..first of God's blasphemies is near.

Intoxicating perfumes subdue supressive indoor airs,
Godly good strikes and erases workplace cares.
Hominid festival, mind-numbing music at high decibals
Lewd sexual scenes obscenely interfere at ingrained intervals.
Expected anxiety with every step into destiny's fold
With civilized morals left to rot away in bitter cold.
Unaware of primal prowlers..picture perfect quintette
Dangerous deitie of death creeps closer..but unaware yet.

Creeping creature of uncontrollable crucifixtion
Doesn't want to slaughter these girls..it's just that god's diction..
Warns him against those types..
Sinners that his church calls asian devils and kikes.
Tarnishers of Jesus' word..he gazes as he sleuthes
Brandishing his ice pick..the pen to his hand of truth.
Eyes glazed and red with the glory of Adam's life..
As he pulls his arm back..preparing to shatter biblical strife.

Four girls were slaughtered that night..dozens in shocked fright
As the man stammered in tongues, founding his damnding plight.
Church influenced sacrifice..murder in the name of Christ
This sick-minded SINNER will receive 20 years to life.
Last moments of their existance in this polaroid CSI found..
With the devil's heartless pupil staring from the backround

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...05#post1847405
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=156259

don't sleep..upping.

I didnt see the dude in the background till u pointed him out.
Is his eyes red? scary son.*looks around*
Nice verse all in all.
Nice flow. Big words. lol. Good imagery.
U really worked off of the picture well. who's picture is that btw?
Anyhoo. Good Job Mac.

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yea.. i didn't notice that in the background either...

really nice vocab... but you should try using some internal rhyme to keep things at a steady pace.

That's about the only critism i can give.

upping again.

it takes talent to make a rhyme over a simple pic u made something from al;most nothing here and thats talent your dialect may be hard at times to simplify but all in all this was fire no doubt.