-fuck life's glitches-

(what the fuck?) is what i scream when i wake up!
what the fuck & why the fuck did i go wrong, whatsup?
i wasted all my life cuz i was depressed, my (ego) unique!
i didnt give a fuck what u thinked, so fuck you wit tha pashin!
everyday u saying (such) this & (such) that, but i never listened!
dont u understand im not like u, i rather dispise & hate u!
how the fuck u think im sopose to respect u, evilness runs down my spine!
satan gave me a curse & i cried when (god) looked down on me
he told me do u want life in (serenity) or condemed for (eternity)
i chose serenity but the devil gives me these (feelings?)
its unhealing as i discard random (emotions) from fondaled humans!
my fuckin blood boils as u constently think i wont comitt yur murder!
fuck u! i dont care if i die, i'd rather have died in peace knowing yer dead!
somebody fucking help me! what the fuck is wrong wit my head?
i'd cut my wrists in a (dare) just to see how that shit blead!
im a fuckin nut step back or i wont hesatate to dump a full clip!
i put a bullet in ya hip first to see yur reaction before i (commence!)
*omg what have i done?!*:( not knowing my self actualization!!
extermination from ya opinions cuz termination is mans best friend!
just look at our history & how the (human nature) is so fucking cold!
i mean how the fuck u gonna kill a baby then have no emotions shown!
fuck this! im gonna do this right, fuck the (ride) im taking the highest flight
im sick of failure & tired of not knowing mans best knowledge
*i mean doggs jus look how these pplz polish?*
i wanna be the elite in every catagory!!!
my (story) will be full of glory!!!
so fuck u! get the fuck away!
im fucking hurting man...
the pain is overwhelming
i have to fix this!!!!!
fuck! but im stuck!
no more! no more!
fuck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
no!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
no!!!!!!!!!!!!!
please no..
im sorry
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Wow very interesting man.....Impressive for a first drop.....good job....

Some lines were a bit strecthed an it could use minimal work but i enjoyed the flow...As you are new to this site i can already tell with time youll be pretty good.....good job bro...Impressive for a newbie....Peace

Wierd / Interesting structure..

Your trying to make the piece look nice.. When you are sacrificing the flow of the piece for the mere look of it..

Do not do that..

Transitions!!!!! Make them smoother..

Anyway.. Lesson almost over..

Work on the above..

Keep at it..

Pz..

lmao aight uppin

uppin...

It was good I liked it but it was kinsa wierd but it was still good