Facial Expression (Clisk ft. Kaotic Theory)

Clisk - 1st
Kaotic.Theory - 2nd

Facial Expression

Cream with wet peaches;
Suffocate soft speeches.
Reach underneath …
.. The vocal cords;
And untangle this caress.
Colors coat the difference;
To paint these love dividends,
That's within you.
Travel loose;
With no regret,
Step forward to step,
Two steps back.
Shower me your shadow
And linger around;
…With your own emotions.
Stare with me
Into the gazes of transience,
Lying on the ground;
…To be one with the earth.
Feel that warm breeze,
Squeeze between…
… Our sterling and infatuated eyes.
Sipping our noose;
Of emotions that's wondrously;
Soothing each others minds quietly.

“Hush little lady
And don't you cry.”
Ill share n’ wrap;
You so gently with care,
Ill never let you go.
Stare at me again…
… please just one more time,
To see the “forever” I sacrifice for.

cry me thousand's
bodies of liquid's
playing violin's
vomiting sickness
remorse is plowing
an infinity of sorrow
civilians vowing
no happiness tomorrow
youthful soul's
starving for hunger
the anger is building
into a storm of thunder
so many mixed feeling's
it's raining this summer
drops of red splashing
upon this surface
culture's are clashing
war's pushing it's furthest

so understand
the moral is to learn
in this current life's lesson
that these are the mourns
of many confession's
and the action's
behind the facial expression's

This was a nice collab, well constructed by both, the metaphors in here were well placed, along side the wording, my only problem would be at times you kind of drifted from the topic and it almost seemed like it was writing lines for the sake of sounding good rather than dragging the reader further into the piece, yet maybe that is just me being picky, but aside from that this was really quite enjoyable, i've never read anything from clisk, so it was nice to see some up and coming talent for the future as we here in PS need some more dedicated writers, as for the topic, it was fairly original, and that's always a good start to a piece, when you have the right topic, i feel you maybe could have spent a little more time on the imagery, but once again maybe that's just my preferance talking, either way, nice piece guys.

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poeta im clisk...lmfao you've read a shit load from me...

lol.
KT you should've said ft. Mr.Write but its cool..

but word bumpin....

i like ClisK:(
upp's

ugh why we getting slept on come on.

people are gay.....*and wow my old posts are back* except now i dont care lol

^^yup...

shits gay

bump

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